Whoooooooooop! What a mad dash of an affair yesterday’s contest was! Thanks to everyone for showing up and playing in such impressively good (and hasty) form. And now, here are the results for Round 34. Don’t forget all stories remain eligible for dissection by Monday’s Flash Points feature.
Judge Patricia McCommas says, The stories this week were creative, original, and entertaining, with a few stories leaning toward the dark and mysterious. Narrowing the list down was very difficult–I had to read, reread and, in some cases, rereread. Thanks to everyone who participated, and congrats to the winners!
Lisa McCourt Hollar, “And Then There Were None.” I love the 180 degree change from “Who in their right mind lived on top of a mountain” to “Who in their right mind accepts an invitation to dinner on top of a mountain.” This was a power-packed play on words. You could remove all the other words and still have a complete story in these two lines. What great writing.
The Imaginator, “S’no Goat.” Creative and original. This is a complete story infused with suspense until the end – and you did it all with dialogue. Great job! Now I want to know if they survived the missile. The moral of this story: don’t count your chickens before they hatch.
MT Decker, “Good Eats.” Excellent, well-written piece. I love its originality and the unexpected twist at the end. I did not expect “good eats” to mean humans as dragon food! Great job.
DoctorMikeReddy, “Ascension.” The story is original, creative, and engages my emotional senses. The trip down is a frightful thought. It made me think of those destined for the highway to hell. Their glimpse of heaven would make hell that much worse, knowing they could never enter. Really good story and well-crafted. With a bit of polishing of the end, this would make a great flash story for publication.
2nd RUNNER UP
Ian Martyn, “One Last Time.” I love that you tell the story from the deceased’s POV. Creative angle told poetically while embracing both sadness and excitement for what lies ahead.
1st RUNNER UP
Pratibha Kelapure, “Untrodden Sorrow.” Excellent, poetic opening line. This is an excellent, romantic piece overshadowed by sadness for the love she will never have. Pure poetry in motion, told in flash style. Love it.
And a super fast but totally heartfelt welcome to the winner’s dais: our Flash! Friday
DRAGON WINNER IS….
for “Above the Cloud.” This is an excellent story and a perfect example of showing, not telling. You engage our senses to SHOW Giovanni is blind without actually saying it. Your descriptions are clear and poignant. Well-written with vivid images. Congratulations, Allison, for a spectacular (and moving) story.
Congratulations, Allison! Here are your Winner’s Page, your very own rapidly but brilliantly crafted eBadge (below), and your winning Tale. Please contact me asap (here) with your email address so I can interview you for Wednesday’s Sixty Seconds feature.
Above the Cloud
Giovanni breathed in deeply, filling his lungs with crisp, mountain air. A certain calm silence surrounded him. The only sound was the wind. It whipped around him, mingling the thin air with Ana’s perfume. He smiled and reached out for her arm, his boots crunching the snow as he turned.
“Oh, Giovanni,” Ana sighed. “It’s amazing up here. I have never seen anything so wonderful in my life.”
He didn’t need to see to know how beautiful this place was.