§ Foy says: A deliciously chilly sol 10 to you all! Here in the United States, we’re well into the season of specters (not just the political kind), and as is tradition for many, we at the ice dragon crypt lair are dutifully staying up far too late and hijacking our amygdalas. Thanks to a recent Gothic horror kick (brought on by Silvia Moreno-Garcia‘s latest novel Mexican Gothic [read her Flash! Future post here]), Mr. Foy and I stumbled across “The Haunting of Bly Manor“, Netflix’s loose—very, very loose—adaptation of “The Turn of the Screw” by Henry James. Without dropping spoilers or delving into a broader critique, what’s most striking to me about the series is how it engages with humans in and proximate to mental health crisis. As characters on screen struggle with grief and trauma, I feel my body brace for the familiar mental-health-shaming-as-conflict device only to have that tension dissipate as characters in crisis are met with unquestioning support and empathy—even grace!—from those around them. Viscerally, it’s unexpected, refreshing. I find that level of acceptance and understanding here with you all at Fire&Ice as every week we pour our words out into the world, embrace new challenges, and generally survive 2020 together. Thank you. ♥
QUESTIONS? Tweet us at @FlashFridayFic, shoot us a note here, or tap any of the judges.
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Fire&Ice Guidelines:
Time: The Fire&Ice contest is open between exactly 12:01am to 11:59pm on Fridays, Washington DC time (check the current time here). Entries submitted outside of this window are welcome, but will be incinerated ineligible to win.
How to Play: Write and submit an original story 1) based on the photo prompt and 2) including EITHER the fire dragon or ice dragon‘s requirement. Pay attention to the 3) varying word count constraints! Story titles (optional) are not included in the word limit. At the end of your story, add your name or twitter handle, whether you chose the fire or ice dragon’s element, and word count. That’s it!
Be sure to review the contest rules here.
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JUDGES: Today’s judges are Voima Oy and A.J. Walker. Check out their bios on the Fire&Ice Judges page.
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AND HERE IS YOUR PROMPT:
Each Fire&Ice prompt includes 1) a photo, 2) a required element (choose between the fire dragon or ice dragon’s offering), and 3) a specific word count. Your story must include all three requirements to be eligible to win.
Photo for Sol 10/19
Fire dragon option: include a student
OR
Ice dragon option (inspired by this): include a roadworker
Today’s word count: 89 exactly
The Apprentice
I was but fifteen in 1890, the year I began my servitude with Klier. My father, afraid that I would be drawn into acts of political resistance, sought to ensure my future, my life.
My country had then been in volatile disarray for five years. Burma had been demoted to a British colony, an Indian afterthought.
Klier guaranteed my father, who once helped Klier acclimatize to the splendors of Rangoon, that I would be well positioned in my new profession.
“He will seize the heartbeat of Burma,” Klier promised.
Fire Dragon Option; A Student
@billmelaterplea
89 words
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So much history packed into 89 words through one individual’s tale. Well done indeed.
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“Burma had been demoted to a British colony, an Indian afterthought” – the devastation in this line, a country colonized into disarray. Makes the final line that much more poignant.
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Culture Clash
Ba-da-Ching
Ba-da-Ching
“I can’t dance any more.”
Bam-bam-bing
“You won’t freeze if you dance.”
Bam-bam-bing
“No one is out this late.”
Ba-da-Ching
Ba-da-Ching
“We shouldn’t have sold the violin.”
“My arthritis, little one. It fed us for months.”
“I’m sorry I couldn’t learn to play. And I can’t sing.”
“You can dance. Here comes someone now.”
Bam-bam-bing
Bam-bam-bing
“Look, Chris, folk dancers!”
“Something for Instagram. Local color.”
“Don’t you have change?”
89 words
Student
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I felt the exhaustion of this.
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Thank you! 89 words is a great challenge.
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Some subtle messages beneath this rhythmic piece. Nice one.
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Thank you!
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The juxtaposition of cheerful music and desperate circumstances all captured for an Insta moment… </3
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The Distance
My mum talks at me from across the aisle. She has been dead for three years. Street music drifts through the bus window, A xylophone rattles like chattering teeth. She clacks her knitting needles, talks about the day. Books to the library, bits from the shops, a swift brandy in the corner pub. She doesn’t know it’s changed. That everything has changed. Outside the man in hi vis turns his sign from red to green. Stop to go. She doesn’t know. There’s nowhere left. Nowhere left for her. Here.
@bex_spence
89 words
ice dragon
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What a beautiful, poignant portrayal.
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Lovely imagery in this..
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I adore the rhythm of your final lines – there’s the music, implicit. At the start though – the simile for the xylophone was boss.
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Thank you. Appreciate your words.
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I have to echo Shakes. Your final line feels, for me, like the last ticking notes of a music box left open and winding down.
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Grey River
Grey river. Gritty grey river rushing up hill. Pushing against its banks, filling every crevice.
The abrasive liquid pouring along its trench.
The hypnotic churning and falling.
All eyes on the race against time.
Each one in their place. Almost.
No voices can be heard against the roaring.
No cries for help, no last gasps.
Grey forcing itself against flesh, breaking bones with its weight, stealing breath.
Last moments of grey fear fade into nothing.
Life solidified into grey, into darkness.
Dim light. Orange flashing. Blue flashing. Too late.
@rjkinnarney
89 words
Ice Dragon: a roadworker
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Oh, gosh. That’s left me feeling quite breathless. Really well-handled pace and delivers the sense of sombreness so effectively.
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Thanks very much, Helen. I’m not sure where my sombre came from. Unusual for me.
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The march of ‘progress’ – loads to digest here. Great.
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Thank you. Yes, the battle for progress and the sad collateral damage.
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Wow, really powerful. Can feel the crushing weight of it.
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“Grey forcing itself against flesh, breaking bones with its weight, stealing breath.” – The force of the flood waters. Chilling.
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Futures
There was a time people walked barefoot here, on solid stone, and I might have been unemployed. Now there is traffic, tourists, and tarmac.
Fresh tarmac smells like a tired lover in the morning, when neither of you have slept: an astringent, organic aroma, heavy with the memory of effort and grime. But when my work is done, that heaviness is real in me, and all I can do is shower, and eat, and go to bed alone, to dream of work.
One day, I will be a tourist.
@marshawritesit
Word count: 89
Element: ice
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Another one where I felt the weariness. Loved this phrase: Fresh tarmac smells like a tired lover in the morning
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That last line hits just right.
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I love both the extended metaphor and the neatly packaged last line. Really good.
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You’ve captured the heavy, soul-weariness that must come from forever paving the way for privileged others.
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The smells and sounds of the street as that of a tired lover. Touching and original! I really enjoyed these words.
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~A Fairy’s Tale~
There’s a fairy, who lives inside the musician’s guitar. When her silver wings flutter, his guitar plays.
The musician and his band travel everywhere, and play outside monasteries and pagodas, temples and mosques and churches. The fairy travels in the guitar case, in her own little bed.
She was the musician’s teacher in the early days, teaching him songs of love, peace, and tranquility. But on these travels, she’s the student, learning about religion from the musician.
And she’s found religion too, that of a sacred friendship with him.
@ArvindIyer15
89 Words (excluding title)
Element – Student
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So lyrical and beautiful, Arvind. What a lovely idea of the fairy.
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Thank you so much, Rebecca!✨🙏
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You hoiked me in with the first line. Absolutely delightful, Arvind.
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Thank you, Helen!✨✨
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The muse and the artist in role reversal. Nicely painted.
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Thanks, David!🙏✨
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I love the fantastical twist you’ve pulled off with the fairy in the guitar!
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Thank you, Deborah!✨🙏
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What a heart-warming story!
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Thank you, Pippa!✨
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3 Museums
Wide-eyed, innocent, young, I wandered the museum’s galleries taking in the items made by people the world over. Music always fascinated me and my eyes fell upon a group of Burmese musicians, making my mind up.
In Burma, the museums seemed lacklustre in comparison, so little.. and I made my mind up once more.
Changing my major to science I set about reforming museums entirely. Now so many have a time travel room, so you can go back and see treasures plundered from around the world before being returned.
@jamesatkinson81
89 Words
Fire dragon option: include a student
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I do like pondering time travel stories – potentials for paradox.
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Oh this is an interesting take on the time travel trope, using its potential for art and history rather than mistakes and murder.
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Shallow Shrine
I was a pilgrim for her, naked and blind.
Behind me were the drippings of my heart, as it pulsated in my hand. Nobody else noticed the love-struck leper of the street since my drippings covered the faded drippings of pilgrims past.
Once at her altar, I faltered, dropping my heart and smashing what it had to offer. More pilgrims came, stepping on the pieces.
Love-struck lepers think themselves lone butterflies in the greenhouse, but dew has covered their eyes.
Seeing anew, I join the roadworkers on the outskirts.
@brett_milam
Word Count: 89.
Element: Ice.
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Love-struck Lepers is my new band name.
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😂🤟
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Fantastic opening line, followed by a vivid clashing of violent images through which the pilgrim finds painful revelation. It’s a fascinating transformation from shrine to outskirts, made all the more telling by the butterfly/greenhouse allusion. Great read.
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Thank you for that kind review, Rebekah! I’m glad you liked it.
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DON’T WORRY IF IT’S NOT GOOD ENOUGH
They began as a four-piece – Nyan and Thet on flute, Pemala on xylophone, Mima on triangle. Their sound, like Wagner played on a jewellery box, ice-picked in your brain and maddened nearby dogs.
They had no collection hat. There was no point.
Then Nyan left to train as a monk and, though they tried carrying on with Thet covering Nyan’s notes, they eventually packed away their instruments, and their dreams.
But Thet later found success in New Orleans jazz clubs, where a nickname like Two Flutes was practically obligatory.
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Sorry, 89 words, Fire Dragon challenge
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like Wagner played on a jewellery box – fabulous image. Now I know exactly what they sounded like!
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‘ice-picked in your brain’
The perfect description!
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Ah, trademark Tinman clever writing. Loved the details, particularly the descriptions of their ice-pick sound. You beat me to using the two flutes as a device too.
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A FAMILY OF SOUNDS
You were more than my teacher.
You taught me to give myself to the music and trust that it would turn out well.
As I learned ever more complicated rhythms and tunes , the music took me away from my reality. It didn’t matter that my family refused to acknowledge me now. I had the notes and the melody to support and nurture my soul .
And now you’re gone. But I always told you I would make sure your music lived on . Trust me Sir.
89 words
Fire option : Student
Rab8241
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Love this Steve.
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Cheers Shakes
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You’ve captured so well the healing and liberating power of music. Despite the protagonist’s suffering of rejection and loss, I love the hopeful note at the end, and their determination to continue the mentor’s music. Really lovely.
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Thankyou
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@Karl_A_Russell
89 words
Glancing mention of students
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Very Clever Karl.
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Ha! What fun! I wonder what the Dragons have to say about this…
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I would like to know how you found out about my mindsweeper jellies.
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Honestly Rebekah, how many times have we done this? You tell me about the jellies, offer to demonstrate then regular as clockwork you do it all over again!
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DY. ING.
“The whole of the year 2020?” Um, yes, please. 😀
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Ten unsolved murders in two weeks. Dachen wandered the street, watching. Any one of the many crowding the market could be the killer. The bookish young man throwing the wilted bok choy, glaring daggers. The old woman haggling over rice, spitting words like poisonous seeds.
A large crowd encircled three street musicians, mesmerized. The musicians themselves seemed entranced. The music hooked Dachen’s brain, drawing him like a fish. He couldn’t look away. Neither he nor the crowd noticed three ethereal figures ascend from the players, bloodied knives in hand…
@colin_d_smith
Fire Dragon: A Student
89 words on the dragon’s nose 😉
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A left-turn of the genre at the end that had me wanting more! You must have loved the genre mashups from last week!
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Thanks, David! Last week’s was an interesting challenge, and I nearly participated. I thought about doing a Western, because I’ve never written a Western. It was just one of those days, however, where I simply couldn’t come up with something I thought would be good enough to enter. Not so this week! 😀
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Uh oh, cliffhanger!
Such a lot of plot in so few words, nice!
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Thanks, NLiu!! 😁
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ITINERARY
I stood at a distance, shimmying off my backpack; it would be rude to pass.
The stupa, wearing a crown of thorns, winked at me with golden eyes; I forked my fingers into the kyat in my pocket… enough for a donation. For a candle and flowers.
Underlying the melody, a low hum throbbed.
The flock of sweet notes, musicians, and onlookers dissolved.
A dark line scribbled itself in the ground. Ants?
The scaffolding lurched. Clanged down the pagoda, tumbling, bouncing.
Disappearing into the gaping mouth of the earth.
@helen_laycock
Word count: 89
Fire Dragon prompt: Student
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Oh my, Helen, I didn’t think it was going there. Excellent!
A dark line scribbled itself in the ground. – Great line.
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Thank you, Rebecca. I did a bit of research and found that earthquakes have several times destroyed the pagoda in the photo…
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The economy of language against the immensity of the story is brilliant Helen. “A dark line scribbled” is a perfect description. Bravo.
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Thank you so much, David.
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Love this one. Amazing description. You can feel the movement of the earthquake. Terrifying.
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Thank you so much.
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The musicians were often praised with smiles as they played their compositions in a peaceful, contented stupor. The road sweeper swept around them daily and greeted other villagers kindly until they saw a masked couple run through the village and the music paused.
On the run, in masks and wedding attire, after their heist went slightly askew the couple stopped for a breather and to plan their next move. The music resumed and it calmed their souls enough to forgive the best man for the plans being drawn incorrectly.
(@lindorfan, ice: roadworker/sweeper
89 exactly)
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Now that’s a power we’d all be better off wielding! I love the contrast of what the musicians look like against what what their music actually accomplishes. And what a great picture of a wedding heist.
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Thank you. 😊
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“Plans drawn incorrectly” sounds like just the bit of plot tension a heist story needs!
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Where? There!
He’s in every photo. Crowds, anyway. The boy with the sad eyes. Ever since… well, you know.
Even John looks for him now. It hurt, at the start when he said he was ‘just some student’ but even he couldn’t deny how odd it was, him in every crowd scene. Sometimes it takes while to find him, but I do.
Today he began to fade. I knew he would. When he became a man. Thirteen. I’m glad.
I’m not sure how John will take it. Best not to say….
89 words
Dragon requirement: student
@geofflepard
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Such an intriguing piece, TG.
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very interesting..
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Such rich mystery here! the boy appearing in photos but now beginning to fade. So many questions I want answered. I love your world building & the shadows of what’s not said.
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Thanks Rebekah. Very generous
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Discordance
Stopping, he tilted his head towards a melodic four, four signature. Walking towards the music, bricks he’d laid tesselated perfectly beneath him – four by four, squares in the square.
Three played four instruments – unacceptable – four by four. Snatching the second pipe from an incredulous musician, he blew discordant notes, ruining time.
As police wrestled him away, a faded photograph fell from his pocket. A family of four smiled back. One recognised the woman and children as those recently killed when a cart overturned on an unfinished patch of road.
David Shakes
@theshakes72
89 words
Ice Dragon – Roadworker
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Oh, heartbreaking! I loved the four four link all the way through.
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Oh, the psychology of this is so well painted. So much more than OCD. Well done, David.
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An Ear to Hear, A Heart to Understand
In my head, she is still alive. My grandmother, tough and demanding as she taught me the special things that can only be heard in music. She reminds me of the days we played on the streets for free. Free for the tourists, the roadworkers, the students passing by. Our entire lives were a concert, beating out the secret truths so that anyone with an ear could hear them.
When she died, the music grew hollow.
I still play. For multitudes now. But nobody hears anymore.
Not even me.
@Jay_Tay_13
89 words
Ice/Fire – Roadworker/Student
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What a tragic, poignant picture of things so easily lost between generations. I love the grandchild’s love for their grandmother & how they continue to play their music so faithfully for whoever goes by. That last line though! devastating.
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Well that just made me tear up a little. Thank you.
I still have major imposter syndrome for even being here and when someone sees… feels what I was trying for? That makes my year.
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“Our entire lives were a concert” <– I love this line so much, especially contrasted with the knowledge that while, our MC still plays "for multitudes", the power of the music passed with their grandmother. </3
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Thank you so much 🙂
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Lovely piece, Jay.
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Thank you so much Brett.
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“No.”
The boy frowned, gestured to his googled photograph. “But, professor, I’ve surveyed the literature–”
“It’s not thesis material.” Only for this kid: smug, naïve, convinced free wifi meant he’d comprehended something felt in the bones.
The student left.
He went out, but even in Starbucks that photograph accused him.
Can a man run so far, leave so much, and still be whole?
His bones knew, groaned for home.
But he couldn’t go back. Instead, he returned to the campus and its concrete discord, collar up against the cold.
@nicola_liu_
89 words
fire dragon requirement: student
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So many great lines. Loved this: convinced free wifi meant he’d comprehended something felt in the bones.
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Thank you! Glad you liked it!
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The way the professor shuts him down… His disappointment is palpable.
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The Spark of the Immortal
The distraction worked perfectly. Two flutes mingled our anthem. “It’s our country, our land!!
The crowds bled across the dusty street. Soon the monks would ascend their balconies. Hear the voices below, a show of unity.
Bricks bonded together by force; note bonded together by will.
The Golden Pagoda evacuated, I snagged a hair of the Buddha, leaving behind my own strand.
“Backs crumbled to clay,” I lift three sections of my daughter’s hair.
“The spark of the immortal now passes between our hands,” I recall, and I weave.
Ice Dragon: streetworker
89 Words Exactly
@hartless_k
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Ooo, what a spine-tingling opening! Love the blending of history and your own unique magic here. There’s clearly so much going on here with these mysterious immortals, and I’m enraptured!
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Thank you, kindly. I like the idea of a stolen strand of Buddha’s hair and what magic it may possess for the disenfranchised women streetworkers of Myanmar past.
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I would love to know more about this parent/daughter and the magic they’re weaving together! Also the juxtaposition of “Bricks bonded together by force” and “notes bonded together by will” is just gorgeous.
(p.s. Your slight correction made before being passed on to the judges. <3)
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Thank you. I still want to write more about the magic of a stolen strand of sacred hair. 89 words was a great challenge for me. Cheers!
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should read, “notes bonded together by will.” This was a difficult chisel for me. Happy Friday, fellow writers! Cheers!
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Marco not Polo
Marco pushed through the cheering crowd. Fell in front of musicians. He was exhausted. Bruised. Music stopped.
“Please, help me,” he raised his head, “I’m a student. From Europe.”
Musicians smiled at him. Nodded. Began playing again.
“Will you help me?” Marco pleaded.
Musicians smiled. Marco, on his knees, turned to the crowd. Crowd watched him. Smiled.
“Please, student from Europe.”
Behind the crowd he heard familiar voices.
“Please.”
Voices came closer. Became louder. He can’t go back. Not again. Music stopped.
Everyone in the crowd pointed at Marco.
@raijori
89 words
Fire dragon
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You’re a master of open ends. What happens next 🤔
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Why, thank you. What happens next? I have no idea…..
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oh my WORD this gave me chills!!!! you caaaan’t leave the story there! I mean, clearly Marco doesn’t survive. But still….! –what a vivid (not for long), terrifying scene.
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I’ll leave it to your imagination. Apparently Marco will not survive…hehe.
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Breakthrough
Tonight’s rehearsal did not go well. Rami was his usual experimental self. At some point he started playing two flutes at the same time. Can you believe that? I looked at him and said, What, you think you’re a master? He replied with a fleeting smile, There are no masters, only students. What a pretentious prick! All those flute players really are the same. In the meantime we have a gig coming up on Saturday. I hope it goes well. We need a breakthrough or I’m quitting this band.
@bartvangoethem
89 words
Fire Dragon: student
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Wow 2 flutes sounds impossible 🤣🤣🤣♥️
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ha. Love both the protagonist’s arrogance and Rami’s unflappable spirit. Rami reminds me of a lot of flash writers, like you, with your fresh approach to the prompt each week. Artistry and fearlessness both.
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Sol 10/19
Endings and Beginnings (Title)
“Ten hands clasped fast.”
“Five candles in a circle”
“The dead speaker to facilitate. Let us communicate with the Spirits”
Prolonged silence
“Where are my babies. I was sick, the weight crushed the air out of my body, so heavy, felt bones breaking. So dark, where are my babies. The barking and howling wants out. “
“Where are my babies.” (fading on ethereal repeat
The long drawn out howling comes from the corners
The long drawn out howling comes from four mouths
A fifth joins in
Violin String Snaps
@gamerwriter
Ice Dragon: Roadworker
Word Count is 89
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Spellbindingly dark and eerie. Even without the last line’s violent notation, I can almost hear the haunting strings intertwining with shadow. Chilling.
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How you structured this and paced the lines really drew me in, making the ending especially meaningfully jarring.
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The Mist of Myanmar
“Burma”, you say? And you think of war, genocide, opium, and human rights.
I smile, for you do not know me. How can you?
My heart is the golden sunrise at Shwedagon Pagoda.
My voice the melodic roadworkers of Bagan.
My skin the verdant furrows of Kyaing Tong.
My eyes the crystal waters of the Mergui Archipelago.
If I am a story, then my birth is forgotten, my life misunderstood, my ending yet to come.
My soul, well, this is my children, born in the swirling mists of Myanmar.
_________________
@making_fiction
89 words
Ice
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We wondered if anyone would dare take on Burma/Myanmar! “I smile, for you do not know me.” How true (I say this to my shame). Thank you for this poetic tribute to some of its wonders.
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Oh, just beautiful, beautiful! I love the bookends of “Burma” & “Myanmar”, and the joy of seeing her wonders praised line-by-line. ❤
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Palimpsest
He’s preserved the course since it was a path twining from stupa to stupa and dusting the feet of monks. He filled potholes with mud and mala beads.
Then, a pebbled track connecting villages and smoothed by the tread of bards. He laid lute strings in the ruts.
Even the paved lane tying harvest to town and worn by the plod of carthorses. He mixed the mortar with barley.
Now, this arrogant highway slashes through, destruction linked to destruction. He runs wire about the struts and sets the timer.
@ncscrawls
89 words
Ice Dragon Element: Roadworker
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You had me sold from the title. What a wonderful image, the path to the track to the paved lane… to the deadly (in more than one way) highway. I’d love to know more about this (immortal?? at the least long-lived) character who dedicated his life to the caretaking of this path. Would that we were all such committed caretakers of the land we live on!
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Destruction begets destruction. That last line really turns the whole story on its head!
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Burma, On My Mind
Grandma’s witch broomstick had taken me to Burma. I’d inherited it from her and it had magical powers to travel back in time, turning me into an History student, lapping up various cultures voraciously.
Looking around curiously, the amazing architecture captured my gaze, then was instantly distracted by the most alluring music I’d ever heard. Watched the musicians in awe for a long while before the tantalizing smell of food wafted up, luring me into the shrine where I had dinner, the most exquisite meal of my considerable travels yet.
@spicydicedwatermelon
89 words
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I WANT THAT BROOMSTICK!!!! What a glorious gift, enabling the grandchild to experience so tangibly the riches of the past. (Of course, then my conscience whispers, OK, but how much have you bothered to respect the cultural riches of the present?) A lovely picture, and a good reminder to me.
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A Grandma Witch bequeathing her time-transporting broomstick–oh that’s a novel-worthy concept right there!
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Her hands were steady as she wove the reeds together to make the future. Behind her were a million paths converging on this moment. In front of her, a billion realities not yet realized. With each weaving, her creation became What Is, and as that moment passed, it became What Was. She did not know where the roads would lead, only that it was her job to build them. We humans tread ever upon her roads each day lost in our own lives, her labor never-ending but never seen.
@drmag00
Ice dragon: Roadworker
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I love that you took this in such a mythical direction.
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Thank you!
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I was about to comment on the brilliant opening line, but they all followed suit. Well done. A really clever piece.
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Thank you!
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Agree with Helen–such a striking opening line, and lots of rich ones following. For me that last line strikes hardest though, the time-worn cry of the oppressed, whose labor was never ending and yet so rarely known let alone appreciated. I’m glad that in some places this is starting to change; it will take us centuries, I think, but oh how rich and important the work.
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Thank you, great Fire Dragon Queen!
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Title: Importance is in the Eye of the Beholder
The men stand around the pagoda looking important, talking important. Their serious faces stress the importance of what they do.
The women lay stones to form roads, selecting carefully for smoothness and fit.
The men do not consider this important.
After a day of doing their important things, the men return home and demand dinner and…other things to prove how important they are.
The women make the dinner, service the husband, acknowledge his importance. Silently.
But, perhaps, one day, by mutual agreement, the women will lay sharp stones.
@unspywriter
Ice dragon option
89 words
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I love how thoughtful you always are with your titles, in this case how you’re challenging the reader to think twice about what the photo shows. Love this story’s timelessness (timeliness?) in confronting the sharp dissonance between oppressor and oppressed.
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Who defines what’s important is such a necessary question. How often it seems what we’re told is important ignores the quiet labor of those who have no say in that definition. Thought-provoking.
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Street kids ran in rhythmic rivulets—forged of Mama Gita’s tears when the ‘Great Song’ burst from her belly.
‘Come little mouse!’ They chanted—clapping hands and stamping feet—but he could only pluck at their chords with dissonant fingers.
‘Come little mouse!’ They chorused—drenching him—as they sailed away on Mama Gita’s melodies.
He remembered them now. Practised fingers told their stories—sang their songs of hopelessness—unseeing eyes weaving their harmonies into Mama Gita’s aria.
‘I’m coming!’ He sung in sweet refrain—laying down his violin.
@brittlewindowz
Wordcount: 89
Fire Dragon Element: student
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It’s almost got a pied piper feel to it, like he laid down his instrument to join his followers.
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Thanks Pippa. 👍🧡
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There’s something so special about this piece, Laurence. It really tugs on the emotions.
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Aww… thanks Helen. 🙏😁🧡
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Pavement
The Godsroad is a bricolage of stones and sea glass, buttons and foreign coins, bound with words torn from the pages of Bird’s favorite books. She’s been building it since she was six, and when Oopaka came to her in a dream, depositing into her hand a star that fluttered as fast as a heart in love. Its stability derives the strength of her faith. It doesn’t matter that the shrine at its origin is a dollhouse, that Bird is only one person. She visits Oopaka all the time.
@IpsaHerself
Wordcount: 89
Ice Dragon Element: a roadworker
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What a beautifully unique take on the prompt! I love Bird’s lovely collection of items and the rich imagery throughout–this piece reads like a poem.
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Thank you so much! I might indeed take parts out of this for a haibun.
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“The Godsroad is a bricolage of stones and sea glass” is a line that I won’t forget soon! Such a gorgeous contrast between deep mythos and childlike imagination.
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I was a little inspired by an anime about a god with no followers, not gonna lie.
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“Con Dolore”
I’d paused to wipe the sweat from my brow when a chill, defying the heat, traversed my spine. A siren song—close in distance, distant in memory—bade me to drop my pick-axe and pursue the fluid notes to their fountainhead, despite the entreaties behind me, begging me not to wander.
In a clearing sat a group of musicians, playing as one. Their faces conveyed the serenity I lost the day the soldiers came.
I sang, momentarily happy.
A sharp rifle retort punctuated the final note of our symphony.
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“A siren song—close in distance, distant in memory” <— oh how I love all the layering in this line! This story reminds me of the WWI Christmas Truce story. What a beautiful vision of a moment's respite in the midst of war.
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“when a chill, defying the heat, traversed my spine” <– I love how you ground us so fully in the MC's body with this line. And what a spin on the siren's call!
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Well-written piece, Michael.
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The Great Song
by Arthur Unk
The students sat down with instruments in hand and waited. Each sat poised waiting for the last member of their group to join them. The Shwedagon stirred, opened its maw, and released the muse. A new addition to the Maha Gita began with wild inspiration dancing between each player. Victor Bruce, the Earl of Elgin, stood mouth agape, weeping. He silently commanded his servant to photograph the scene. The picture captured the moment of the last note as the muse retreated back into the mouth of the Great Dragon.
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What a moment to witness!!! I love this blending of history and legend, and how you’ve deftly woven these together with threads of your own magic. Weeping sounds like a very understandable response to hearing a new song for the Mahagita. I wonder how much the earl truly grasped what he was hearing–and I would love to know the students’ (and his servant’s) thoughts. Such a vivid scene.
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How breath-taking and humbling this experience would be! For only having 89 words you capture the totality of this scene impressively well.
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Cuckoo
My stepfather’s power had given me everything, education, money even notoriety. I was adopted when his wife died suddenly. The nation plunged into mourning as he addressed the cameras, urging them to join him in his noble crusade.
He had me mentored by Sullivan, a pompous foreigner whose research had condoned father’s righteous fury. A rage that had cleansed twenty thousand insurgents from our lands.
Souls of music, laughter and joy.
Like my parents, killed by Sullivan’s theories.
Now I patiently wait in his study.
Knife in hand.
@ArcaneEdison
89 Words
Student
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I like how you’ve paralleled national anguish with personal. At the end of the day, isn’t that how it always is? or should be. So much pain bound deeply in politics: when regents play, lives are on the line. Your story provides a vivid reminder of this. I also love the perfect contrast between the stepfather’s soulless world (education, money, notoriety) v that of the people he’s destroyed (“souls of music, laughter and joy”).
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Chilling end!
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Different Beat
I’ve hunched here innumerable days, waiting my turn as they play. The beat thuds beneath my paws; I wish to dance, but no one pities me. Not one friendly eye roves my way. No one lifts a shoulder or an open palm.
They won’t teach me their rhythm.
My nose drips with acid rain; whitewashed tears trek across my scarred cheeks. The children frolic before me, but when they catch my gaze, they hide behind their mothers’ skirts.
Dance with me, I cry.
But they run away.
@Tamara Shoemaker
Word Count: 89 Exactly
Prompt: Fire Dragon (Student of Rhythm)
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Love this fringe POV! You painted the anguish of the stone observer so well, the clinging to a despairing hope that one day the children will turn and invite the stone-beast to dance along. It feels like such a resonant cry, representing so many who feel they must be near-invisible too, watching others dance to the rhythm of life and begging to join in, only to be ignored. “Different beat” indeed. I can only imagine the powerful rhythms the stone-beast is growing within itself while waiting!
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He just wanted to dance with them; why didn’t they invite him to dance with them? I’ve been crying over him all weekend. 😉
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I have to echo Rebekah here. I look for them every week and this is probably my favorite peripheral take on the prompt!
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Thanks, dearie!
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The acid rain nose. Vivid. Enjoyed!
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Thanks! 🙂
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Owen and Layla
Ask and he’ll claim he’s a tenured student of the music of life. Only knows one song: he calls it “Owen and Layla,” but he never plays it the same way twice.
Sunny days find him busking in the quad, pouring his soul into music on any of a dozen instruments.
Campus security hassles him. Students pass him by. A few toss coins his way. Only one stops to listen, sometimes, but she never stays long.
The truest human emotion, he says, is not love, nor hate, but longing.
@pmcolt
89 words, student
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What a raw, powerful portrait of this composer, playing his soul-song countless ways on countless instruments. I’d love to know more of his story: how he got to this point, how he survives from day to day, whatever happened to Layla. But that’s rather not the point, is it? this is an achingly beautiful etude.
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There’s so much that music can convey, and yet, not enough on its own as the girl moves on again and again. Lovely and bittersweet.
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“Decades ago,” Aung Kaka’d say, with a faraway look, “my father arrived from Rangoon.”
I’d sit cross-legged on the grass, mesmerised by his tales. Then he’d play his violin.
“My father’s,” a proud smile deepening his wrinkles.
Kaka did everything around the house; grocery shopping, driving, cooking. He was family.
One year, returning from boarding school, I rushed to show him my new violin. He wasn’t anywhere.
“He fell ill.” All mother said.
That evening, under the stars, I put his violin to my shoulder, and let it weep.
@firdausp
Words: 89/student
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ohhhh what a strong, beautiful image of the weeping violin! tying in the stars at the end makes this story of love and loss feel both eternal and resonant. I’d love to hear Aung Kaka’s stories myself, and his father’s!
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Thank you Rebekah. So glad you like it. 🙂
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How I wish we were better at seeing the human in each other! I’d love to know Aung Kaka’s story, too. ❤
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Thank you Deb. I wish for that too. 🙂
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Fire&Ice Sol 10 is now CLOSED. Thank you so much, brave ones, for taking on the draconian restraints of 89 words. Stories from this point are always welcome, but no longer eligible to win. We’ll see you back Sunday with another Flash! Future!
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Monuments
The sun beat the back of her head as she collected stones for the next stretch of road. But to her, they were more than stones. They were memorials. Whenever she dropped a piece of petrified earth into her bucket, she remembered the waves that washed away her home and everything in it. With each clink of falling rock, she whispered a prayer of gratitude for her deliverance. Her husband’s. Their son’s and daughter’s. No longer lush and green, their surroundings were hard and gray. But they were alive.
@ordinaryletters
89 words
ice dragon element
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YOU KNOW all the things I’m thinking and feeling, reading this. What treasured memorials indeed that she’s laying down here. Her choice to breathe out gratitude despite her horrifying loss is deeply stirring, almost palpable, as is her unshakable love for her family. Just beautiful.
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What a prayer pathway this would be…a reminder of deliverance with every footfall. Just beautiful!
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Matriculation
Inzali can’t breathe.
The Sentients’ letter chirps above them:
…requests an envoy from the Southeast Asian Alliance for the next planetary summit. You’ve been selected based on linguistic capability.
Cyber-botanical code would’ve been Inzali’s first language, if May-may could’ve taught her.
“She can’t go,” Pah-k says, ladling giant spoonfuls of mohinga into the mouth of her bowl. Concern brims his eyes.
Do you wish to accept?
Accept the chance to speak new ecological futures into existence, and preserve the old.
May-may’s will is stone-strong.
“She goes.”
Inzali can breathe.
@deborah_the_foy
89 ineligible words
Fire
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Oh how you create worlds. Love it!
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Thank you both so much for reading, and for your feedback!
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Cyber-botanical?!?!? I love that so, so much–what images it conjures! I love the tension between Pah-k and May-may, and I can almost feel the knots in Inzali’s stomach as she waits to hear the verdict. What a brilliantly drawn scene, and though the world is totally different from ours, it’s a scene both familiar and resonant to any here on 2020 Earth. Beautifully drawn. I love this.
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Would you move that lady over, please? Boss’ll want her xylophone-thingie centered against those gorgeous temples for the picture.
Perfect.
Now tell her to play something holy-sounding. Haha, don’t hurt anybody with those sticks, lady! You people kill me.
Have the violinist scoot right. Wait, she’s blind? AWESOME!! Don’t suppose she’s got a sign in English—? Oh well. Is there a hungry-looking kid around maybe? Fantastic. Yeah, stick him right behind her.
Thanks, everybody. Boss’ll be along soon; just sit tight. The things we do for greatness, eh?
-89 words, fire dragon: student
@postupak
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“Now tell her to play something holy-sounding.” this line, for me, encapsulated the entire piece. The insincere-masked-as-holy just makes this whole scene so profane. Angering in the necessary call-to-action sort of way.
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