Thanks to another staggeringly awesome round of entries, results will again post Monday. Thanks y’all!
Well, HOWDY there, and welcome to September! In the United States this week means the start of the school year for many as we wend our way toward fall; meanwhile, our Aussie friends are kicking off spring. Yet here we are, all together. Isn’t the Internet miraculous?! Thank you for setting aside a few minutes, regardless of season, in honor of flash fiction. May today be a fabulous one!
As for today’s prompt: This past week marked 84 years since the hauntingly remote islands of St Kilda were formally abandoned after two thousand (give or take) years of human habitation. Do you know this story? There’s not much to it, and yet…. Read some of the official stuff here; but what you really want is here, especially Chapter 6.
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Returning as judge today is the exceedingly brave Craig Anderson who, if he were anyone else, would be quaking in his boots after last week’s out-of-this-world showing. Since he is not anyone else, however (at least, so far as we know), he is whistling a merry tune and eagerly awaiting your tales. A reminder he’s over the moon for clever titles and witty banter; but what really makes his day is a story hinting of Something Bigger Than What Is Seen. Can you pull that off? Ha. Like there’s any doubt. Read more about Craig here.
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Awards Ceremony: Results will post Sunday (unless you go nuts again, in which case look for results Monday). Noteworthy #SixtySeconds interviews with the previous week’s winner post Wednesdays. I (Rebekah) post my own unbalanced writings sometimes on Tuesdays or Thursdays. And on Mondays, as often as possible, appears our feature #Flashpoints, in which one of your stories gets munched on (think chocolate, not vampires).
Now, grab a seabird and let’s get to it!
* Word limit: 150 word story (10-word leeway) based on the photo prompt.
* How: Post your story here in the comments. Include your word count (140 – 160 words, exclusive of title) and Twitter handle if you’ve got one. If you’re new, don’t forget to check the contest guidelines.
* Deadline: 11:59pm ET tonight (check the world clock if you need to; Flash! Friday is on Washington, DC time)
* Winners: will post Sunday. Probably.
* Prize: The Flash! Friday e-dragon e-badge for your blog/wall, your own winner’s page here at FF, a 60-second interview next Wednesday, and your name flame-written on the Dragon Wall of Fame for posterity.
***Today’s Dragon’s Bidding (required element to incorporate somewhere in your story; does not need to be the exact word(s) unless instructed to do so, e.g. “include the name “Hirta'”):
***BONUS optional challenge: totally optional, not required, nor do you net extra points except in our unabashed respect: in honor of faithful and enthusiastic dragon stellakateT, who cannot write with us today: name a major character Stella.
***Today’s Prompt:

St Kilda, Scotland. CC photo by Neil Wilkie.
Birthplace
by JM6 (155 words)
It had been abandoned a long time ago. Only windswept landscapes and tumble-down cottages remained … along with an age-old instinct.
Stella knew she had to be careful. She’d already avoided the notice of two security patrols. No one lived here anymore; the authorities wanted to avoid any pretext of ownership claims based on where somewhere was born. In spite of the law, she had returned to this place, determined to give birth to her child in the ancient homestead.
“Not long now,” she said to herself. Choosing a cottage which seemed to provide marginally better shelter than the others, she knew she wouldn’t have long to wait. She’d felt the twinge of the first contraction.
Her phone implant beeped in her ear. “What are you doing?” the familiar, too arrogant voice demanded of her when she answered.
“Sorry, Avram,” she said, “but you always knew I wanted my baby to be born here, on Earth.”
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Well done.
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What a great start! I love how the SF ending was hinted at in the “security patrols”.
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Nice reveal at the end. I Didn’t expect it to be an interplanetary story. Excellent job
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Great build up to a fab last line.
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really good they way you steer us one way then get us at the end.
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Oh, nicely done. Love the ending.
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Nicely done. Love the ending.
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Great story.
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I like this twist, that not just this island, but all of Earth, is an “ancient homestead.” Good job!
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Poor Avram.
Good story. Nice use of sci-fi in historic location.
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I love the ending!
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Nice SF take on the prompt!
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Nice twist.
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Very well done, and a great ending.
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excellent ending that really ties the sci-fi aspect into the notion of a fetishised past ..
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The Builder
The cairn is our home.
For untold generations, we have been safe in the rocks.
It’s the perfect home—nutritious grass, water from the sky and others of my kind.
It’s true, the sky occassionally has a kite, but, if we are vigilent, we will be safe in the Cairn before they get close.
In the past we always believed someone gathered the pieces into a pile. The rocks are stacked so carefully. It is all so well planned for our purposes.
We decided we owed the builder a debt of thanks.
Now our leaders are teaching our young that the rocks got here by some natural process. They believe our adoration of a builder is silly. They make us feel stupid.
Soon my babies will be born. I worry about them, growing up in a world without appreciation for the builder. I fear they will grow up believing the rocks fell into these stacks.
155 words
@CharlesWShort
http://www.christianflashweekly.wordpress.com
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“I fear they will grow up believing the rocks fell into these stacks.” One of my own fears. People becoming Sheeple. Good story.
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People becoming Sheeple. Huh. I hope you realize I am going to steal that for some future sermon. I am glad you liked the story.
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That last paragraph says it all, really liked that.
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Thank you for commenting, it helps me to know I am communicating my thoughts and feelings in a way they can be understood.
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Thoughtful and deep, like most of your work. Well done.
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Thank you for the compliment. I guess it proves a deep river can flow from a shallow lake.
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“I fear they will grow up believing the rocks fell into these stacks.” Really liked this a lot!
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for giving me feedback.
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Great job, Charles! I love the way you reference the Builder, and the way this rings with such truth for us today…
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Thanks John. I have missed seeing your entries at Christian Flash Weekly. I hope you will have time to come back soon.
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Me too! I’ve really missed it, but had the fall semester hid pretty hard this year! I think I’m adjusting to that “treading water” feeling all graduate students have, and will try to jump back into the swing of things this weekend!
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Glad to hear it.
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I enjoyed this, Charles. Very interesting.
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Moving.
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A very clever take on the prompt, thoughtful and multi-layered.
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How It Began (160 words)
I’m pretty sure I was born between a rock and a hard place. The rocks formed the rounded walls of my home. The hard place was everything outside on the barren, howling hills.
It was an unforgiving place.
My mother died of childbed fever, they tell me. I was lucky to have survived, nursed by a woman whose own bairn had been stillborn. Since her man was dead too, she became my new mother.
It was a rough life.
It was little wonder, that when the old man came and told me he could teach me magic, I took his hand and went with him.
“I can teach you to make the world a different place,” he told me.
“With trees?”
“With a forest, if you wish. ”
“And a river full of fish? We never catch any.”
“Rivers of salmon. You’ll never be hungry again.”
He smiled. “What is your name?”
“Ambrose,” I told him.
“I’ll call you Merlin.”
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Great story. I enjoyed reading it.
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What a great opening paragraph. A lovely Merlin story. Enjoyed it.
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Great opening and wonderful finish. Loved the dialogue too.
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Excellent opening, and love the ending. Great use of dialogue, too.
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Excellent pacing and what a fantastic reveal, pregnant with possibility.
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Thanks!
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I love Merlin tales, and I can definitely imagine him growing up in a place like the tiny home from this week’s photo. Glad you shared this!
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A good story sandwiched between two great lines.
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Thank you all!
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I like this.
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Cool! Like the link with Merlin.
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What a super opening. I’d like to read more about these two!
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Love that opening line and how you expanded it, as a fan of Arthurian and Merlinian legend, I can only say, “Bravo!”
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Love the idea that someone so powerful could come from such poor beginnings.
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excellent opening line, really enjoyed your tale …
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Not Yours
@goldzco21
156 Words
“Look at the fog.”
“It’s mist, not fog.”
“Fog. Mist. It’s all the same, Stella.”
“Yeah, OK,” I say. It’s not the same.
“Look at this place, it’s beautiful. This is exactly what we need.”
“Yes, it’s nice.” It’s the last place on Earth I want to be, especially with him, but I don’t say so.
“Alone, out here, we can really move forward, honey. We can put your little incident behind us.”
I don’t want to hear his arrogant voice so I agree and stare at the empty, rock hut—a void in the center of the island. Apart from the stone hut, it doesn’t appear the hills were ever occupied. Everything feels dim and grey and empty.
“What are you thinking about Stell?”
“Nothing.”
“Come on honey, you have to be thinking about something. How about we go inside that shepherd hut-thing?”
“No!”
“Stella, what’s wrong?”
“Nothing.”
“Honey?”
“He was my baby, not yours.”
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I like the characters. I wanted to thump him when he said, “We can put your little incident behind us.” Very moorish story, I wanted more!
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great use of dialogue without it sounding too contrived. Great story.
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Thanks. I’ve been trying to improve my dialogue so I’m glad you thought I used it well.
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Loved the focus on the stone house in the picture. Lots of layers in the story. Very enjoyable read.
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Phew. Good thing you said that. I was afraid I would lose the setting with the amount of dialogue I used.
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Liked how you used dialogue here – and how much meaning you put into the line ‘ “Yeah, OK,” I say. It’s not the same. ‘
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Thanks for the read. I’m glad what I attempted to do was somewhat successful.
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Clever use of dialogue. I am so intrigued by the bigger story. Well done.
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Thank you. Your kind words mean a lot.
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That last line is a humdinger.
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Thanks for the comments. Always feels good when I get feedback. I almost went a different route with the ending. I’m glad I used this one now. Seems to work
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Ooh! Zing! Powerfully done.
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Thanks for the read. Means a great deal coming from someone who’s stories are as amazing as yours.
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A very powerful piece, and for all that it’s mostly dialogue, it’s what she’s *not* saying that carries the most weight. Excellent.
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Thanks Karl. Seems like I’m finally getting a hang of this writing thing, but I’m still miles away from being on the same level as you.
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The last line really lingers. Great use of dialog.
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I’m glad I used it then. I was almost tempted to go a different route for the ending. Thanks for the supportive words.
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lovely dialogue and a rich layered tale …
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Thanks. I’ve been working on my dialogue. It means a lot that a flash superstar such as yourself thinks its ‘lovely’,
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Star of the Morning
When I was sure you were coming, I started gathering. I was daft, they said, going around the island collecting rocks, but I just smiled and carried on.
‘Buildin’ a cairn, Aggie?’ they laughed. ‘Stayin’ forever?’
We’d voted to leave, but this island was the blood and bones of me. Oban was no substitute, but I had no choice.
Especially not now.
The day we sailed I had all I owned: my crate of soil and stones from St Kilda, and you in my belly. I watched the island vanish into the mists.
‘Do you see her, baby?’ I whispered. ‘The land o’ your mothers.’ I rubbed a handful of soft, dark earth over the bump, barely there, that was you. High above, a star winked.
‘You’ll be Stella,’ I told you. ‘Star o’ the mornin’. An’ the first soil your feet touch will be soil of the island.’
I was as good as my word.
@SJOHart
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Sigh. I really liked this. A beautiful tale…’I rubbed a handful of soft, dark earth over the bump…’ Lovely imagery.
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Thanks. I’m really glad to hear that. 🙂
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lovely. Great image of the soil and the primeval link between people and the earth is great
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Thanks. 🙂
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Count me in too, I like the same image. Also enjoyed the reference to Oban and the meaning of Stella. Nicely done.
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Thanks! 🙂
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Beautiful tale. Love the meaning of the star, and touching the earth…
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Thank you. 🙂
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Masterful!
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Thank you!
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So very beautiful.
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Thank you! That’s very kind. 🙂
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Love this. I love that she takes what she can of her roots with her. The symbolism of the baby’s feet touching this soil first is wonderful. Your protagonist’s loss is palpable.
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Thanks, Marie. Loved yours this week, too, of course! 🙂
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Beautiful.
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Thanks so much. 🙂
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Very sweet! I enjoyed the characterization a lot. Immediately felt connected to the main character.
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Thank you, Margaret. I’m glad to know that.
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Just beautiful.
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Thank you. 🙂
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So touching. Love the use of the meaning of the name.
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Thank you. Couldn’t pass up using a name like Stella, really. 🙂
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really nice work, some vivid imagery that really lifts the tale …
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Thanks. Appreciate it! 🙂
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@avalina_kreska (160 words)
Auld wives and pike staves
‘North Easterly, it does it every time.’
Magnus nodded watching his wife attempt to manipulate the tiny weak lamb back to life. Laying in water overnight was a sure killer.The lambs mother stood guard until the last, occasionally sniffing its doomed offspring, its udders at bursting point.
‘Nope, we’ve lost it. So that’s six in total last night.’ She stood back, the wind nudging the hood from her face.
‘Why don’t they use the shelter?’ Magnus shrugged, he was pissed off, hungry and cold.
‘Ok, this one’s called Stella then.’ Magnus rolled his eyes. This play acting at being crofters was wearing him down. Surely it’s not enough to just throw some sheep on a hill.
They walked back, thankful for the wind pushing them from behind. Every time she did this, naming dead things, like last night, she attempted to manipulate something else back to life too. He knew it was doomed when she kept calling it her ‘Mr.Bobo’.
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I love the larger story hidden behind this one, and the line ‘Surely it’s not enough to just throw some sheep on a hill.’ The power behind naming something is interesting, too. Great tale.
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Thanks SJ, yes, throwing sheep on hills is something they seem to do around here… Glad you enjoyed it.
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Crackerjack AK
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Cheers!
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Great title. I like the line ‘this play acting…’ I can feel the wind, too!
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Thank-you Pam! A story close to home. Wind – we have four seasons of wind here!
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I was looking forward to this for obvious reasons. I love the sense of loss. I love the use of Stella. Nicely done.
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Thank-you dearest Mark. As Voimaoy said, keeping it real…
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Great story. Thanks for keeping it real, Avalina.
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Thanks very much. 🙂
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Really creative use of Stella, something about the last line is really fantastic, great read.
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Cheers Kyle!
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I love the descriptions of the wind: ‘the wind nudging her hood’ and pushing them home. I like how there is a bigger story. Again, an ending I didn’t expect. Something very comical about the name Mr. Bobo!
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Thank you very much Marie. I searched high and low for a non-offensive name for the male member… 😉
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Love this story, you get so much into the tiny space. The ending is class!
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Thank-you very much!
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Lovely description: “Laying in water overnight was a sure killer.” I saw that, viscerally. Great job!
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Thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
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So much to love about this one – The comic tragedy of naming it Mr. Bobo, the image of the desperate mother sheep, the idea of play acting – all adding up to considerably more than one short scene about a lamb.
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Thanks very much Karl!
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Love the names. Magnus, Stella, and Mr Bobo. Really brought that irony to your tale. Funny.
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The Wanderer
Ian Martyn (@IBMartyn)
158 words
I have wandered this timeless land without so much as my shadow to keep me company. A spirit trapped between worlds. The swirling mist veils features revealing only the path it wishes me to tread. I thought it was playing with me, leading me in intricate circles, a merry dance of which only it knows the steps and to a tune I cannot hear. Then piercing the silence, forcing its way through the wall of fine droplets comes the insistent cry of a child. The damp curtain opens in front of me and closes behind, at the same time enticing me on whilst allowing no retreat. For it knows that I approach that place with both excitement and trepidation for what is to come. With each step the cries become more insistent. I can sense the need, the desire. A life without a soul is no life, a soul without a life is.., well, what I have been.
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Moody and ethereal. What a description…that last line the only possible reality and a great ending. I read it three times.
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Some wonderful writing here. There was a sense of tension throughout too.
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Ahhh, the Otherworld
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This is gorgeous. Poetic. And I LOVE the last line.
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On fertile ground
@geofflepard 160 words
‘What is it Dugald? You look like a ghost.’
‘Bairns. Oozing…’
‘Come in. You’re rambling. Here,’ Jamie offered Dugald a can. ‘Stella. All I have.’
After Dugald had sat and swigged to the bottom, he said, ‘I was sheltering in the old bothy. This cold cloud gripped us. Orange and pink it was. Unnatural.’
‘It’s just another release from the plant. It catches in that dip in the ground. Chemicals and sunlight.’
‘Aye? And the bairns?’
‘What bairns?’
Dugald stood. ‘Come and see.’
The men tramped across the moor. Jamie heard those familiar noises, torn on the wind; he knew what he would see before he entered. Dugald stood back. Six babies lay on the wet earth. The seventh was emerging from the soil, its wet stained face puce with the effort.
‘Told you.’ Dugald belched. ‘That’s what comes of voting Yes to Independence.’
‘Eh?’
Dugald picked up a mewling infant. ‘Like the man promised – Birth of a nation.’
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Hahah! LOL! Most excellent! But sinister too. Really enjoyed this Geoff. Enjoyed ‘Stella’ being booze, enjoyed the ref to the coming vote (I’m still undecided!) and the birth of a nation was just a pucker ending!
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lovely play on words. Awful/great image of babies emerging from the soil!
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Highly enjoyable. Loved the ending.
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Very good! That play on words is excellent. ‘On fertile ground’ is great, too. I really like how you’ve used the current events in your story. Exciting times for us in Scotland!
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Unexpected and ace, you mix flippant and poignant so well
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Bwah ha ha, great ending!
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After Pompeii
@Making_Fiction
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After Pompeii, they banished me. I’d protected them for centuries, but humankind needed to find comfort, reason and blame. A god of fire and wing was an easy target.
I watched fertile land birth a thriving city. I watched the sins of greed, the exchanges of coin for touches of flesh, and choice of ignorance over the obvious.
I watched from my volcanic skies, weeping, as pumice grinded, lava flowed, and choking dust cemented lungs. I watched the prophetic storm unfurl. Now they gaze, in surprise, as immortal concrete icons.
The survivors drove me to the isolated cold, believing I could do no harm here. From St Kilder, I witnessed the same mistakes of ignorance. This time, death from starvation and disease. Distended bellies giving fleeting life for tetanus take it back – infected knives ripping at umbilical cords.
Not today. For this child, born under the sky of shimmering stars, is under my protection. I will call her Stella.
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great ambivalence of the narrator – not sure whether he/she is good or bad
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Thanks Pam. Really grateful for the comments. Loved your piece.
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Thanks Mark
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This. is. gorgeous. What rich language, imagery. “I watched from my volcanic skies, weeping.” I’ve got chills. Well done, Mark.
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Thanks, Tamara. You’ve made a Friday Flasher very happy 🙂
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I love this dragon story! Epic sweep of history and humanity. The language. The details. Just great writing. Well done.
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My first dragon story. I tried to make the dragon sutble, but I realise I have risked it not making sense. Thanks a million, very kind of you.
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No Mark, it is very clear — and very beautiful. Truly original tale…outstanding work.
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Ha ha, I have to admit, I did not catch the dragon part, but I loved it just the same! I was thinking Greek God Haephestus or something.
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Your use of language is stunning. I also love ‘volcanic skies’. I love ‘the exchanges of coin for touches of flesh’ as this type of image is tricky to handle well. The observer’s comment on humans is sad and haunting. Excellent writing.
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Thanks Marie, given how much I love your writing, these are wonderful comments to receive.
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I enjoyed the reference to Pompeii and watched a lovely tale unfold, such a lot packed in only 160 words. Beautiful, rich language – you never fail – Stella will be taught well I feel.
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Thanks Avalina – In hindsight, I probably should have spent more time on the island – but I gave myself a couple of extra tasks this week. This was your week really, with the link to the island – I thought of you as soon as I saw it.
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As above! The little details you bring out are incredible.
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Thanks Liz – and it’s brilliant that you’re now a Flash! Friday addict too 🙂
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One of my favorites of yours, Mark. Rich imagery, love the incorporation of mythological elements. Very moving and well-told.
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Thanks Margaret, coming from such a fine writer (and Judge and Dog Days Champ too), this makes me feel very happy. I really appreciate it.
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Truly mythic, epic in scope and poetically detailed. Love that you called her “a god of fire and wing” too.
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Thanks a million, Karl – as always you set the standards very high 🙂
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Love this! First, “god of fire and wing”–what a perfect name for a dragon (or demon, but for me it was dragon). I also love that you link Pompeii and St.Kilda, melding history and fantasy. I looked the “dust cemented lungs”. “Distended bellies giving fleeting life for tetanus take it back”–this part of the history (along with the dogs) gut-punched me and you presented it with no less punch. Makes me wonder what the daughter of a dragon might turn out to be.
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Wow. Thank you so much. Such lovely and thoughtful comments. This has made my evening. Twas a dragon (but I tried not to make it too obvious).
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excellent work sir, the interweaving of myth and imagery was really wonderful …
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Thanks IR, very kind and gratefully received.
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Bird Island
(160 words)
Gavin’s eyes were black beads in a blue complexion. The biting winds of the cliff face had sculpted an old man across his own.
Little more than a babe, he had joined Father for the bird harvests. Dangling from rope, his toes and fingers seemed to curl round air as he scaled land that was created for birds.
He didn’t want to leave, but it was what had happened to the dogs that made him hate Father.
The yowling took him to the water. Father was securing stones round their necks before launching them by their bound legs into the sea.
Gavin had witnessed the steady hand and pace of their executioner.
The morning of the evacuation, I heard screams and ran to the kitchen.
I saw Gavin’s lips mouth, ‘Mother’, but all I heard was a squawk.
‘Don’t do this to your father!’ Mother said to what was left of him, but he pounced and swiped with his claws.
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Aargh! Please may I have ‘Little more than a babe,’ replace ‘At ten’ so that I can fulfil the bidding and thus remain in the competition! My word count is 160, now. Thank you. The finest chocolate is on its way!
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You are very generous, Rebekah! Thanks.
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very disturbing! Loved the way you used the history of the island into the story. Great image at the end.
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Thank you. That’s very much appreciated.
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Always love your work. The (real) history of the dog killings makes for a great focal point. Top entry.
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So kind of you. Thank you very much.
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A really evocative and visceral story. I love it, Marie. Beautiful language – and I love that you chose to focus on the killing of the dogs. Amazing.
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Thank you! I am so glad you liked it.
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This turned out really well, thank you for the great read 🙂
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Thank you! Much appreciated!
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Phew – a lot of tension created here with an amazing ending, very powerful piece. ‘The biting winds of the cliff face had sculpted an old man across his own.’ – so wonderful Marie, this story felt somehow heartfelt. It reminded me of something I read about the people of St.Kilda who used to harvest the Fulmars, a dodgy occupation due to the poisonous parts! It was estimated they ate 115 fulmars each a year…
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Thanks for the brilliant comment. What a strange and courageous existence the residents of St. Kilda led.
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The biting winds line, as well as your opening one, were wonderful!
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Thanks, Margaret, so pleased you’ve said that.
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Stunning description of Gavin to open, and the horror of the final paragraph brings real shudders.
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Thanks for that! Really pleased you liked the final paragraph.
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Biting Down
160 words
Mary curled her fingers in her skirts, ignoring the cool air that brushed her skin like a shunned lover seeking forgiveness.
Her family told people that she needed time away on St Kilda, time to mourn her bairn but Mary wouldn’t mourn that creature because she’d never loved it.
She remembered the way it clung to her teat, dark eyes watching her knowingly. That thing had never been a baby but Mary could never admit it to her family because if she did she’d have to admit her sin.
Clasping her hands before her she pressed her lips to her thumb, the Lord’s Prayer riding her breath.
She held her pose, even as tiny fingers tugged at her skirt.
Mary wouldn’t give it the satisfaction of looking at it, knowing that all she’d see was the gaping maw hidden beneath human skin.
“Mama,” it whispered and Mary laughed.
She didn’t stop laughing even when sharp teeth pressed against her breast.
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I love this–dark and electric as a spider bite. Well-done!
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Terrifying.
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Wow! That title! And then the story… amazingly sinister…fantastic. (shudders)
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Creepy! Well done, but now I have the shudders!
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Dark and creepy – Amazing!
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Sinister! Any woman who’s experienced serious nursing-aversion might sympathize here. Seriously, though, some gorgeous imagery. I particularly liked “the Lord’s Prayer riding her breath”, the tiny fingers (which transform into claws in my primed imagination). Having her laugh through it makes it come off all the more dark and twisted.
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Cast Away
That final evening, after dusk, villagers saw a figure standing at the cliff edge, casting something into the sea below.
Jeanie spent the afternoon sitting small on the hillside overlooking the bay. The Highland wind blew her worries to the Eskimos and she knew that when they all left the island tomorrow, their secrets would remain hidden amongst the rocks and heather.
Life moves forward, but it can be as brutal as death. She had witnessed them, yesterday, hurling their dogs from the cliffs; rocks around their necks which they prayed would snap before the hounds plunged into the hungry sea.
Everything had to go. Everything.
Jeannie walked slowly down the wilding hill and, like Orpheus leaving the Underworld, knew that she must not look back. Not for a second. She entered their house where her mother waited for her, cradling the baby in her arms. Ignoring the tears that watered her cheeks, she stepped forward and took her child.
160 words
@_sarahmiles_
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You’ve really captured the loneliness and isolation – great story
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Thanks, Pam!
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Enjoyed it. Very sad. …’Life moves forward, but it can be as brutal as death…’ This line really summed up the story for me.
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This is fabulous – great description that captures the mood, and that first line ought to be an opening for a novel.
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Rock Monster
It pounded over the crest of the hill, oblivious. It grazed with a doorway mouth, snuffled around for new stones to add to its body. It seemed so peaceful. Stella saw no bones draped across its back, no goat entrails spewing from its cracks. If anything, it kind of looked like a goat: meandering, eating, minding its own. How could this thing be the Scourge of St. Kilda?
‘Permission to engage.’
‘Are you sure, sir? It looks-‘
‘Engage.’
She fired up the manipulator. Fields buzzed and spat into life.
The creature froze. Rubble skittered and crumbled from its flanks. Stella took a tentative step forward. The creature lifted its front end off the ground, as if sniffing the air, as if tasting her. A low grumble came from its mouth, echoed far deep in the distant mist.
‘Stella, abort!’
Her heart thumped like falling rock.
‘Stella do you read? This thing is the baby. The Scourge is coming, get out!’
@DHartleyWriter
160 words
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great action sequence in such as short piece. Great last line
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Love this! What a killer last line! So funny, yet so action-packed. Well done!
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Classic monster movie stuff – “This thing is the baby”. Loved it. Want more about the Scourge.
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Great ending, that was fun.
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Love this!
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Most excellent! Great idea!
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Cracking take on the prompt!
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Ha, great, unique take on the prompt! Very much enjoyed it!
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Wow! What a great creative take on the prompt.
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Great, now I can’t look at that idyllic cottage on the moor without thinking, “Ack, Scourgeling!” That’s a fun take on the prompt.
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The rocks rose up like islands
@voimaoy
160 words
In my dreams, I had come to this place, before I had ever seen it. I had dreamed of him before I ever saw his face.
I was running in the city with the wild boys, under the empty eyes of the billboards overlooking the expressway. It was always overcast there. We never saw the stars.
He had come from the south, where the plague was ravaging the cities. He had come for me, he said. What girl hasn’t heard that line, but this time it was different. When he took my hand, I knew with the certainty of gravity, the rightness of it, the falling in the grass of it. The rocks rose up like islands.
This new world emerging from the mist.
There are a few of us here, where the island meets the sea. At night, there are the stars. My belly swelling with the moon.
She will be the first of the new ones. My star-child, Stella.
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lovely title. I like the line ‘my belly swelling with the moon.’
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thank you so much.
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Wonderful, in so many ways. Too many great parts to name on my phone keyboard. Congrats.
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Thank you so much, Mark.
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Lovely setting, dark and rich. “Under the empty eyes of the billboards overlooking the expressway.” Well done. 🙂
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Thank you, Tamara. Love what you did with yours.
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Full of striking imagery. Fantastic writing.
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Thank you so much, Marie. much appreciated.
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…’under the empty eyes of the billboards’… Wonderful. Lovely story. Beautiful words from a beautiful soul. Always such a lightness to your boxing glove of story telling, wham – the story hits you in the face, laced with intoxicating poetic language.
Have you thought about marrying Mark? 😉 Imagine the children you’d have!
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Thank you, Avalina–so glad you like it. Ha ha, it would be fun to collaborate on stories….
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Stunning as always – I hear echoes of the greats in everything you write, but all with that distinct Voima twist.
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Thank you, Karl. Much appreciate your comments–and the work of all the amazing writers, here. 🙂
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Absolutely stunning. Exquisite, poetic turns of phrase.
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Thank you so much, Margaret. Really in awe of what you do.
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I love your layered use of imagery–“the empty eyes of billboards” at once describing scene, tone, and background of a character that might be swept away by eyes not so empty. I loved how you closed the abstractness of her certainty with “the falling in the grass of it”.
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@pamjplumb 160 words
The Power of Love
Undisturbed below the sweet tufted grass that fed the sheep and hid the rabbit holes, under the ancient peat where moles and worms made their secret soil cavities, deeper than the ice burrowed in winter, lay mother and baby. Sheltered from the proud wind their bodies became skeletons. Over time their flesh dissolved into the surrounding earth, each layer breaking down to reveal the bony whiteness that would shine bright if ever light would penetrate their bier.
*****
Wrapped like a gift in swathes of mist, he whooped at the sight of it. ‘Stella, we’re here. I’ll get a fire going.’
Stella nodded, her breath coming in short gasps. ‘Let’s hope this works, Toby.’
He watched as she ran her fingers over the stone walls, garnering power from the ochre and green mosses. Never a believer in magic, he would do anything to give Stella the baby she craved. Even this.
They lay together, bound by love and hope.
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Love this piece. powerful magic.
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Thanks for your comments, glad you liked it
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Just my sort of thing. Wonderful writing. Spilt story. Sense of magic. Happy reader. Good luck!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Wow! The language in that first part is wonderful. The second part is heartbreaking and hopeful. Original, too. Really enjoyed.
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Lovely story telling as usual, I feel sure that the ‘magic’ will fill them both…such a great take on the photo prompt.
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Very clever take on the prompt, and quite audacious to tell two stories, centuries apart, in such a constricted format, but you made it work so well.
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I like the mythology created here – really absorbing, and I’d love to read the longer story.
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thanks for all your kind comments – what a supportive bunch we all are!
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Tamara Shoemaker
@TamaraShoemaker
Word Count: 159
Mother
When the wind sweeps o’er the moor,
And the heather rustles, disturbed, ‘neath the weight of it,
When the rich scent of peat coats the forty green shades,
And the wee folk chatter in the deep mists of evening,
I return to the cairn to dance with the babe
Stolen from me, the night the banshee screamed.
We cavort on the stones that mark the bones,
Dancing our lullaby, our Danny Boy,
To the tempo of the gales
That wrench our breath from our lungs,
Mine healthy and pink, hers gray with ash and rot.
We frolic and gambol in our own wild art
Through the night when the gray dawn lightens the mist
And the cairn claws my baby back to its cold breast again.
They say I am spirit, the woman of the mists,
Who wrings her hands while treading the moor.
Perhaps I am. Perhaps I am simply Mother.
Till next eventide, my babe.
My Stella.
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Tamara, I love that you have consistently high entries every week (which might not get the recognition they deserve from the judges). But your readers appreciate it. You are incredibly versatile with your writing, but I think this is where you excel. Stunningly beautiful. Congratulations.
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Thank you so much, Mark! That means a lot to me. I do enjoy it, it’s such a wonderful creative outlet. Not only writing, but reading the other entries. I’ve really enjoyed yours as well; you consistently dip beneath the surface, and I look forward to reading it each week. Thanks again for the compliment! 🙂
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Dearest Dragoness, could you possibly change the “gamble” in the third paragraph to “gambol”? I’d hate to think the Texas Hold ‘Em has any part in this piece. Lots of Cadbury coming your way in payment. Thanks!
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I agree with Mark! This is wonderful, and week after week you delight me with whatever you produce, be it poetry or prose. I’m so glad you’ve joined our community!
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Thanks, Margaret! I appreciate it! 🙂
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Really liked this – wonderful images and great use of language.
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Thank you, Pam! 🙂
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So very beautiful and rich with imagery, I agree with everything Mark says, amen to that!
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Thank you, Avalina! I appreciate you saying that. 🙂
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This piece strikes me as a Scottish version of La Llorona (the Weeping Woman, of Mexican lore), giving her space to express her pain. Such a beautifully lyrical voice you’ve crafted. Particular lines that bit into me: forty green shades, the cairn clawing back the baby to its cold breast (that especially), the contrast of lungs, the banshee scream. I love how you bring together the supernatural and the natural, leaving questions. Is she dancing with a memory or has the babe actually been animated by “wild art”? (The answer to that being of the same ambiguity you leave us with: spirit or mourning mother?
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Perhaps the piece is an echo of the many parts of my own personality that are at variance with one another 🙂 I’m pleased you liked it. Thank you for your kind words. 🙂
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Utterly unique, and beautifully done. As dark, disturbing and magical as the finest fairy tales.
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Wow, as a life-long fan of some of the Grimm brothers’ darkest works, I am extremely flattered. 🙂 Thanks!
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Wonderful writing. This is magic.
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Thanks! I appreciate it. I loved the prompt this week; it reminds me of the year I lived in a remote spot of the northwestern portion of Ireland, where cairns and peat and heather were plentiful and the crash of the sea was our constant accompaniment.
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What a powerful and evocative place! Thank you.
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Ben Miller
@NomDeBen
Word Count: 159
Blame
Furious at the Knight who stole the affections of his princess, the Sorcerer cast the ancient spell. Compelled by magic and the blood of innocents Gaia pushed forth the blister of rock and dirt, trembling as she ejected her infant spirit from her womb.
The mud golem’s ruby eyes glared with hatred at the enslaving Sorcerer who commanded “Imprison the one who defies my desire for the princess in this hole until their bones turn to dust.” The golem thundered towards the unsuspecting castle.
The Sorcerer waited, gleefully imagining the broken and humbled face of the Knight, hostage to the immortal golem.
When the golem returned with the princess the Sorcerer impotently shouted, “No, you fool!” as he realized the mistake. The knight had so enamored the princess that she, herself, defied his desire. She was cursed to die in the earthen womb. The Sorcerer ignored her pitiful pleas turning towards the castle. The Knight would pay for this!
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Great fun – lots of magic and earthy references this week!
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Thanks!
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Great imagery of the mud golem. I read this story a couple of times to take it in. Very enjoyable.
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Thank you. I had to write it a couple of time too 😉 I appreciate the feedback.
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“Bister of rock and dirt”–I loved this! It evoked the picture wonderfully. It also lent weight to the idea that Gaia didn’t want any part of this, but was “compelled”–making the Sorcerer even less of a sympathetic character. And, in keeping with that, he refuses to be schooled by his mistake. The last line strikes the perfect note for the character.
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Thank you so much for your comments on this. You give me hope that somehow I’m managing to imbue the feeling into the words.
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You have made it real for me. Thank you so much.
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Through Frozen Fog
by Katrina Ray-Saulis @kraysaulis
Mother rowed with strength and expertise.
“Where are we going?” I asked between the rhythm of the oars.
“Home.” I could not remember home.
The air was cold in my lungs. Colder than on land.
I held the seat to keep from going overboard on a swell. Mother pointed, smiling.
The fog began to swirl and spin. It pulled bits of ocean up and shattered them like an icicle dropped on stone. With each shattered bit of water the fog thinned. Each breath seemed warmer and the sky grew bright.
The shore ahead was peppered with people. Naked babies clung to parents and older children ran barefoot. They worked to pull us ashore and I looked into their faces. My hand flew to my pointed ear.
They looked like me.
“Welcome home,” mother said, pulling off our coats. She tucked her hair back, exposing her own pointed ears. Pale yellow wings unfurled from her bare back.
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lovely – the line ‘The shore ahead was peppered with people’ is great
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I’ve been all about alliteration. Peppered with people was too good to leave out.
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Nicely done… great reveal.
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Thank you. 🙂 I enjoy a twist.
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This unfolded so beautifully to such an uplifting and unexpected reveal. Good work!
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The Senile Baby Collectors
160 Words
@_HannahHeath
“I don’t like this place,” Clara announced decisively as wind whistled through the crooked rock walls. “It brings out my rheumatism.”
“You should’ve thought about that before you murdered him, dear,” Stella said cheerfully. “We have to hide somewhere. People don’t like it when old ladies murder people.”
Clara looked shocked. “Oh, but I didn’t murder him, darling!”
After careful consideration, Stella said sweetly, “I think that shooting someone who ends up dying counts as murder.”
“But I didn’t mean to. He should have given it to me when he saw I wanted it. He wasn’t very gentlemanly,” Clara shook her head disapprovingly.
“But we’ve got so many already.”
Clara didn’t respond, but only smiled down at the baby nestled in her arms. A piece of moss fell from the roof onto its nose. It began to cry.
“Oh, look at the tiny thing,” Stella cooed.
Clara laughed gaily. “You know, I think it’s the most beautiful one we’ve taken.”
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This is great! 🙂 I love your take on the prompt and can totally imagine them hiding away in there.
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This is wonderfully sinister!
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From title to final line well done!
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Oooh. Dark stuff. Very League of Gentleman.
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Love this! Wicked good.
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Wow. Thanks everyone! I’m so glad you all liked it! I got a kick out of writing it. =)
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I love the happy, murderous old ladies…fun story.
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O my word! Love the dialogue 🙂
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You have such a great style of writing, always bringing humour (I’m a sucker for that) wonderfully quirky story, so compelling. Great storytelling Hannah.
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Thanks again people! I really appreciate it. I’m glad I was able to give you a smile. =)
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I love how you set this up as two old biddies talking about murder as they might the prices of shower caps, and then end so sinisterly. “We have so many”–which, once known, provides an even more delicious thrill than the whole murdering thing.
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I now want to know *everything* about Clara, Stella, the old man, the babies… So funny!
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The Stone Crumbles: A Writer’s Journey
The baby’s beaming smile ignites Stella’s soul.
Excitement, energy, and enthusiasm suddenly swirl around her, pushing her, prompting her to create.
Ideas, images, and impressions dance through her head, taking shape, trickling onto paper.
Love, laughter, and longevity—her community becomes alive, vibrant, and real.
The people are beautiful. She’s proud of them, and of herself. Hard work has forged a heritage, a new history unwinding back through the ages.
Nervously she welcomes visitors, invites them into her community, to stay and learn the song of her heart. She’s sure these experienced travelers can help her fledgling community prosper and grow.
“Life here’s too slow and the people are too nice. I’m bored,” they say, turning and walking away.
Her community crumbles, just like that. Her people flee, leaving behind only the stone skeleton of a life once filled with magic and wonder, now obscured with heavy gray fog. The dancing has ended, the excitement has gone.
(157 words)
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Wow. That is so beautiful. I love the concept! I think every writer can relate. =)
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I’m SUCH a fan of alliteration: “Ideas, images, impression”, “Love, laughter, longevity…” I love the deeper meaning behind the whole piece, the brilliant flash of excitement at the beginning, the despair of delusion and lost hope later. Well done, Carrie!
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Yes ! You say it so well.
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Great evocation of a peoples’ history.
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Thanks for the kind words, everyone!
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Gosh, what an interesting take. Such an impact, and a touch of genius with “Life here’s too slow and the people are too nice. I’m bored,” they say, turning and walking away.’ – such a clever piece of writing.
I think the judge really has his work cut out for him again.
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I like the parallel with Eden–too nice, too peaceful = boring. As creators, we find that contented characters don’t engage the readers very well. Our plots, by definition, must imply some type of conflict. Cool conceit.
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This is great. I like how you build up the author’s excitement and then crush it. OK, that sounds horrible – I don’t LIKE it, but I can relate to it, as so other many are saying. I like the image of the stone skeleton.
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A Sooner Tomorrow
My swollen feet waver on the trail. I shouldn’t run, but I can’t help it. After miles we’re finally here. Moisture pools as my hand reaches to support my stomach. Fellow villagers—or what’s left of them—crowd. I yelp out in pain. The line behind me is forced to stop. Everyone stares at my belly. Blood threatens to surface through the scuffs caused by the gate. Only yesterday my growing child was our people’s hope for the future. Now she has made me too large for a chance of tomorrow. The enemy announces their whooping call. I nod at my wide eyed audience and step to the side. The stones gnaw my back as I slide down to the earth alone. Stella tumbles inside me. My eyes release a teary hello. Another sharp pain digs through my flesh. Much harder than the last one, I wilt over. Perhaps a safe tomorrow isn’t too far away.
@meganbesing
156 words
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lovely sense of hope at the end.
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Thanks….I like hope 🙂
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A great sense of the foreboding crowd, very claustrophobic.
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Thanks for taking the time to read my story! in this crazy world, it means a lot. 🙂
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Some strong imagery through here: pain digs through flesh, stones gnaw, wilt over. I love the change over about tomorrow, from despair to hope.
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Thanks! That’s very encouraging.
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Sacrifice
@EmilyJuneStreet
160 words
“A wild dog,” the priestess had said. “Catch one for my sacrifice, and I’ll free you.”
Stella searched for days, stalking the nearly mythical creatures. Shadows coursed along the ridge. Dogs, hunting in the mist? Was she the center of their chase, prey rather than predator?
Pointed ears poked beyond a stone mound. Stella crept over, finding three puppies battling over a gory bone. Wild dog babies.
Shrieks erupted as vultures assaulted, lured by the bone. Two puppies disappeared in the flurry of beating wings. The last puppy snarled at the gnashing, bloody beaks.
A bird gouged Stella’s arm as she snatched the puppy and rolled into the stone mound for protection.
The baby dog burrowed against her.
Tears filled Stella’s eyes. She stroked soft ears. The puppy could buy her freedom, but having saved it, Stella hated to sentence the animal to a senseless, unnatural death.
“I’ll say I couldn’t find one.”
It seemed the only sacrifice to make.
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Well-done, evoking history—and a wonderful story!
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Thanks, voimaoy!
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This is a great story. Good for Stella! Such a short tale and yet I already like her. =)
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This story happened–I think–because my dog’s name is Stella. I rescued her from the mean streets of Costa Rica as a tiny puppy. Thank you!
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I’m glad it was a happy ending for the dog…poor Stella, though.
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They saved each other in the end. Lovely.
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I like how you generate sympathy for the pup amid all the action, so I don’t want her to give it up for sacrifice, either.
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Good for Stella, and good for you too! Great story 🙂
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Love
She makes her way, slowly, up the beach; exhaustion bearing its weight so heavily down upon her. It takes her every effort to keep from scraping her swollen belly and unborn across this coarse sandy beach. The adrenaline left her blood hours ago. The salt water purged from her lungs, only minutes ago. The water from her womb, seconds ago.
She drives on, she must; a structure is near, she can see it in the distance, stones upon each other, a cave; shelter, topped with the same soft and comforting grass that cushions her feet as she makes her way up the slope a little way, panting from an exhaustion that must not overcome her.
Finally, she’s here, sanctuary, a womb for her to retreat into as she gives birth from hers and into a dark and stormy world. A breath is gasped, then another, cries are heard, two pups are born.
John Tate
@johndotpy
152 words
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really liked this – especially the way you link the shelter as a womb to hers.
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Thanks Pam. There are some great entries this week, particularly yours!
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Lovely anxious build-up, to a fine reveal.
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Thanks Avalina.
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Neat how the whole story hinges on that last line– and yet, you did indeed hint at it in the first paragraph with the belly scraping sand. Those are the best “surprise” endings.
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Thank you
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Broken thread
I met the man beside the stone house. He came at sunset, the baby in his arms. He didn’t have to explain; I knew exactly what happened. She was chosen. That was all there was to it.
“Her name is Stella,” he said and looked up at the swirling stars. As he did so I wrapped my cloak around me, hiding me from his sight. It was better this way. In the morning no one would ask after the missing child. It was the same with me.
I stepped into the stone house; our halls. Some called us faeries. If only we were. But someone had to do the work.
The other women looked up from their looms for a moment. Only mine was empty, the last thread broken at the moment Stella’s mother gave her last breath.
One day I’ll have to tell her how we are chosen. I’ll have to tell her that it was my fault.
Words: 159
@CarinMarais
http://www.hersenskim.blogspot.com
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very atmospheric and a little bit creepy!
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I *was* planning on writing a happy story – not quite sure where this one came from! 😀
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Coo, mysterious. Really enjoyed the last line too.
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Thanks! Glad you enjoyed the story.
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I enjoyed the reveal (the Fates mistaken for Fae), and the idea of “thread” tying (ahem) it all together.
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Thanks 🙂 I wasn’t sure if I gave enough information to mark them as Fates and not just a bunch of women – so yay!
I have a feeling this is going to turn into a larger story.
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I really enjoyed this one, and would love to read the expanded tale one day.
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Thanks Karl! I hope you don’t have to wait too long *gets out notebook* 😀
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Yes! So much more to this story….very well done.
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
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Margaret did as she was told, carried her baby across the moor to St. Kilda’s Barrow. She’d named him Ian, after his father.
She had to be brave, like Ian’s father, brave Father Macquaig. How he had trembled when she brought the baby to his rectory door, when she told him the child was his, when they prayed together; when he told her, then, of the baobhan sith and how it could only be sated by the blood of the chosen child—this very child!—sacrificed in the barrow of St. Kilda.
The barrow was close now, an island in the mist…
Something was not right. Father Macquaig had instructed her to remove the entrance stone, but the stone was already gone.
Inside the barrow, Margaret found another village girl, Agnes, cradling a bloody bundle.
“The chosen child,” she cooed. “His own daughter…”
“Whose?”
“Brave Father Macquaig’s!” Agnes said, weeping reverently.
Beneath Margaret’s cloak, Ian laughed for the first time.
John Murray Lewis
@ozmodiargh
160 words
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a little gory – but good
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Yes, cringed a bit envisioning that ending. Thanks for commenting!
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Such a big story in 160 words! A wonderful moment. Very amusing!
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Thanks very much! Glad you enjoyed it.
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I like how you set up the fallibility of Margaret in the very first line, so w knew right away that whatever she was doing, was probably as a tool for someone else’s treachery. And with such economy and punch are we exposed tote reverend’s pattern.
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Thanks for the kind thoughts! It was tough to insinuate such plot and subterfuge into such a short space, and I’m not sure I succeeded, but I had a fun go at it!
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Oh no! a very lucky escape for Ian Jr., but how many others were less fortunate? Great work!
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Thanks! I shudder to think! (As a new dad, I suspect there are some anxieties playing themselves out here…)
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Oh, creepy. Nice twist, but scary!
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Thanks! Yes, a bit unpleasant to consider…
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Sionnach
by Nancy Chenier
@rowdy_phantom
160 words
A screech claws the moorland like metal talons over bedrock. A sound more terrifying than Sweepers.
Halted in hunting, Rainche’s ruddy head pokes up from the heather.
“What’s that?” I ask.
She bolts, an orange streak aimed at the rock dens.
“Wait! Sky-drop soon!” Sky-drop sweeps the land of prey—foxes only sometimes prey. Still, I follow my mate.
In the den, the shrieking deafens. Rainche snuffles at rags where a bald cub squirms, its face squeezed red. It smells of fresh grouse.
“Human,” she declares.
I spin a startled circle. “Impossible!” Humans were swept up long ago.
“Quiet it,” she says, “before sky-drop.”
“Eat it.”
She bares her fangs, yellow eyes deadly.
I swipe its belly with my tongue. Rainche growls. The cub’s wails cease, face softening.
A rumble lowers from the clouds.
Whimpering, Rainche curls around the cub. It grips her tail, mewling. I curl with my mate, concealing the prey, as the sky drops over the den.
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great first line!
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Thank you!
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I like the bald cub being the human, I didn’t get it at first but then read it again. You captured a very tension filled hunt, lovely language. ‘Eat it’ – gave me shivers.
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Thank you so much. I’m glad you got something out of it.
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Amazingly interesting piece, I love the originality. Great use with the bald cub.
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Thank you so very much!
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Fabulous description: “Rainche snuffles at rags where a bald cub squirms, its face squeezed red. It smells of fresh grouse.” You fabulously evoked the sensory here — great job!
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That’s kind of you to say. Thank you.
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A startling piece. I love the little tricks you play with language to evoke a truly non-human perspective.
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Thanks! I’m glad you noticed that.
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No Caving – *** Judge’s entry, just for fun! ***
Margaret Locke (@Margaret_Locke or margaretlocke.com)
159 words
There’s a hole in my heart caverns-deep. You carved your way through me, never minding where your touch left scars, where your smile wreaked havoc, where your eyes, greener than the greenest grass, seared my soul.
I long to build a fortress, stone by stone, walling myself off from the pain, the memories, the world. I want to blacken the windows into my self, so that no one ever sees the mess you left me. I want to become my own island, my own stronghold, my own walled-off castle.
I will do none of those. I will walk on. I will climb out. I will create a space, an embrace, a small opening for this life that even now is weaving its magic through my body. A tiny heartbeat echoes my own, giving me a reason to go on, reminding me this place is no longer yours for the taking.
And we are no longer yours for the breaking.
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Wow, I love this! Heartbreaking and beautiful. Excellent work.
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Thank you, Ms. Carrie! I really enjoyed your piece, too!
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Oh. my. gracious. Margaret, I love all your pieces, but this one left me completely blown away. Amazing, amazing work. So much layering, depth of meaning, beautiful, rich language. I confess to the sin of envy. 😉
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Well, gosh, golly, gee. Thank you! I don’t feel this was one of my best efforts this week, but I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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shame you can’t win because this is great
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I’m so flattered. Thank you.
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Lovely piece, Margaret. It read it the lyrics of a heartbreaking song. Special work.
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Phew! Heart wrenching stuff! That final line the clincher.
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What a splendid way to describe a pregnancy, to seal off its magic from the pain of the relationship–thus forging a new relationship, one that is a stronghold it itself. This resonated with me.
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Thank you!
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Beautiful and searing. For any of us who’ve had a broken heart, you nailed it!
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Beautiful work Margaret 🙂
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Poetic and moving and very well written…
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Thanks so much!
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This is so beautiful! And it works independent of the picture. Love the poignant last line.
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Thank you very much. 🙂
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***Judge’s Entry, For Enjoyment Purposes***
BABYHOUSE
I am a caterpillar, wriggling my way uphill. You can hear me coming if you listen carefully. The stones clatter, the grass makes a fffft-fffft-fffft sound.
No one listens for me.
I am coming for you.
I am not ready yet. As I go, I gather the stones. I pull them in, one by one. As I move up the hill, I grow. One row of stones at a time. A little taller, a little wider. My mouth gapes open a little more.
When I reach the ridge, I shall be twice the size I am now.
Are you afraid?
When I reach your village, I shall be monstrous tall. And you shall be asleep. The stones clatter, the grass goes ffft-ffft-ffft. You shall not awaken.
Your last realization shall freeze your face in a silent bug-eyed howl as I entomb you.
I am the Earth. You are in my way.
151 words w/o title
@betsystreeter
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you’ve really conveyed the sense of something growing and threatening – very good
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Thanks! I’m actually in a pretty good mood today, really. 🙂
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What a last line!!
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I love how the cute little ffft-ffft becomes menacing. It goes from “Hungry Little Caterpillar” to ancient Devourer. I like too, how in the end we become the bugs (bug-eyed howl).
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This is one of those pieces which will stay with me for a long time – so menacing!
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Stella lurched over the last hill, clutching at the front of her dress in agony. She reached the stone domicile just in time; she could feel the bairn being coaxed out by the cool fingers of mist riding low in the air. She ducked inside. Into the black heart of a home, dug into a green hill.
She left her body on the floor, momentarily, when the Tacksman’s bairn finally shuddered out with a single prolonged wail. His face was sweet and red, still slick with her oils. She studied its shape for traces of the Tacksman- she could find none. He was hers alone, at least in possibility; it was possible that the Tacksman’s imprint had stopped short of her son. Given time, the boy could grow to resemble the man that he would call his father.
Or else, the scarring on her heart could heal… but over time, men only grow into their monsters.
Allie Lahn
@allie_lahn
156 words
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very good last line of a great story
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Fantastic account of giving birth, leading to a fab reveal, what a final line it is!
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Hollow
John Mark Miller – 159 words
@JohnMark_Miller
“Will you be my bonnie lass?”
The words stung my memory as I tipped the boat’s captain and stepped onto the island. My island.
Grey fog drifted across the desolate hills. It was all so beautiful, so familiar… and so lonely.
My feet carried me to the small, stone hideaway that frequented my dreams. If I closed my eyes I could still hear the cheerful folk dances of my youth, could feel the wild abandon of a first kiss, and the caress of my Kedrick as his intense, green eyes eclipsed the glowing moon.
“Will you be my bonnie lass?” His passionate whisper tickled my ear.
The eerie stillness reminded me that this was but a hollow shell of the place I knew, and I felt the emptiness within the very depths of my soul. But my answer would never change.
“Aye,” I told the quiet walls.
I felt Kedrick’s laughing eyes, and together, we danced the night away.
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lovely ending to an evocative story
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Beautiful, beautiful story.
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You captured such loneliness here. The phrase, “Will you be my bonnie lass?” echoed to great effect.
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She Protects Those Who Attack Her. (153 Words)
The house, Stella, endures all attacks. Fog smears its greasy hands over her, rain, with fists flying, pelts and pleads to release the secret within. Storms have their way with her, but the rape of high winds can’t topple down her structure. But, this new thing that crawls upon the grass, like bacterium, a germ upon the highlands is a threat.
The threat creeps in an unnatural way. Two sticks, legs, plod upon the fields, tripping, clomping. Stella hears shrieks and yelps that form some strange language, echoing off the hills. To Stella, this is a violation of innocence. The hills support her, make it possible for her to withstand the elements.
These legged things enter her belly, digging, placing objects inside her and around her, as if studying her very existence, her history. They will, eventually, find the secret, the tiny baby skeleton which Stella protects. The child’s spirit cannot be unleashed.
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great use of language and imagery
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Thanks. I had fun writing this piece.
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Such an interesting and unique take on the prompt, I really enjoyed it!
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Liked the stone structure itself as the main character, and you have great imagery.
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Thanks Margaret.
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We Three Kings
Nostrils flared, eyes wild Thunderstruck was ill at ease. Connor gave his mount a pat on sweat wet flanks. “I know I smell them too. ”
“I told ya we needed men” offered Ferguson. “If yer bent on riding in’ta a trap don’na do it alone.”
They edged toward a small hovel of stone and sod no more than a wart on the highland slope.
From over the rise came the Dwarven king bearing armor older than the hills. From the direction of the sun came the resplendent, high king of elves. All converged at the poor man’s hut. Each greeted the other with curled lip, narrowed brow or the odd grunt. Awkward, they made their way inside.
It was Connor who spoke first, on bended knee, before the newly born king of Fey.
“From the race of man I bring our finest spun lambswool.” He peeked over his outstretched hands. “It is in the tartan of me very own fathers.”
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@ToddStrader
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great line – ‘a wart on the highland slope.’
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Great story! What a fab take on the greatest birth story ever told. So enjoyed that last paragraph.
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What a cool reimagining! I love the promise of reconciliation between the various creatures, just by attending this birth.
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Condemned
“So nobody lives there anymore?”
“No, sweetie!”
“Is it like a vacation home?”
“Not really.”
“Can we visit there sometime?”
“People don’t visit that place.”
“Why not?”
“They just don’t.”
“But Mom, in this picture, it looks like a fun playhouse. Milo and I love it.”
“Milo’s just a baby and you won’t like it there. You don’t get any toys or food there. There are no shops.”
“Then how did Gramps live there for so long?
“He kind of had to.”
“Why did he have to?”
“People didn’t like Gramps.”
“Was he a bad guy like Lord Voldemort?”
“No, sweetie. He was a gentle loving man.”
“Then why didn’t they like him? Did Gramps like them?”
“He loved everyone.”
“I don’t get it. Why did he live all by himself?
“People were afraid of him. They always suspected that he had bombs.”
“Did he have bombs?
“No, he never did. He just looked like a terrorist with his turban.”
Pratibha
@needanidplease
160 words
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really good job of intriguing the reader without labouring the story
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How sad but done with a very delicate touch.
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Well done, very fast paced, great dialogue.
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wow. speaks so loudly, yet in the sublime, of current events. sadness, yet recognition. great job.
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LOL! Excellent.
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SHE LEFT
Brian S Creek
157 words
@BrianSCreek
“Stella!”
“We have to go,” I begged. Our baby son cried in my arms.
“I’m not leaving our daughter out here,” she said as she stepped away from me.
I pointed towards the hills. “The mist is closing in. We won’t have time to make it back to the village. If she’s in that then she’s already gone!”
Her lip quivered and tears ran down her face. I looked around and saw a cliet a couple of hundred yards away. “Let’s get inside and wait out the mist. They can’t get us in there.”
Her heart struggled but her mind agreed. We started to run to safety and that was when we heard a scream from far behind us.
“Stella?”
Before I could stop her she’d turned and ran back towards the mist, towards her death.
Helpless, I scurried to the cliet. Seconds later I heard her scream too.
I sat inside and held my son tight.
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Whoa. That’s horrible. And Sad. And completely wonderful. =) Great job!
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Thank you Hannah.
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Wow! That’s terrifying. A parent torn between the safety of two children is the stuff of nightmares. Then, you take it to another level!
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Many thanks Marie. I don’t think I’d have written this before I was a parent but it’s something I can think off and put my own fears into.
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DOUBT
Brian S Creek
140 words
@BrianSCreek
(sorry, had two ideas this week)
He heard it again.
No doubt it was a baby, its wincing wail escaping the stone hovel and echoing across the moors.
From his mount, the rider saw clear to all points of the compass. Alone, ‘cept his horse and the source of those cries, he closed cautiously on the hovel, experience moving his hand to the hilt of his sword. The distressed infant resided inside.
As a father himself the rider was unable to ignore the cries and abandon the infant in this desolate landscape. Mission be damned, he couldn’t ride on by.
He dismounted and stepped up to the entrance. The darkness inside was eternal. The rider drew his blade and entered.
The crying stopped. The rider was dead before he could gasp.
The demon was fed.
It would be a while before the wailing would begin again.
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beautifully creepy!
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Thank you.
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Really great story. I enjoyed the entire thing, especially the last few lines.
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Excellent work. Both were good. This was probably my favorite.
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@Thank you Mark. I know as a parent I shouldn’t have favourites but I like the second one too.
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What a twist! Had to read it through again and loved it even more.
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Neat idea of a demon using a baby’s cry to lure prey. Well executed, too (pun only partially intended)
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Title: Shut Up So I Can Sing
Word count: 160
http://rashatayaket.wordpress.com/
“Shut up, Stella! It’s your horrid singing that got us kicked out of Scotland.”
“Yes, it was my singing. Had nothing to do with the fact that that you broke into the mayor’s house?”
“I have half a mind to ask the judge to exile me alone instead of with my ‘loving’ wife! They’ll send you back to the mainland where you can bother other people with your cacophonous voice.”
“Charles, you didn’t used to mind my singing.”
“I didn’t used to mind you either but things change.”
“Yes they do. I married a gentleman and now I’m the wife of a criminal. Times certainly are different!”
“I never would’ve gotten caught, Stella, if you had warned me the police had arrived! You got distracted by some baby in a carriage! If you had warned me I would’ve gotten us enough money for us to leave Scotland.”
“Well, we’re out of Scotland. Happy? Now stop shouting so I can sing!”
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This made me chuckle. Loved the line “I didn’t used to mind you either but things change.” I know couples like this.
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Thank you! From what I’ve observed it’s the couples that fight out loud that make it! Those who never fight keep it all in and its toxic. Thanks for your comment!
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Silence
@jujitsuelf
160 words
Alone I am now. Silent and abandoned.
Here I have dwelled since before time began. My devotees knelt at my grassy altar, worshipped at the cliffs, the hills, the ravaged shore. They heard me in the wind, saw me in every smile, praised me as each newborn babe wailed.
A mother goddess I was. Many felt my fingers upon their brow, saw my face as their own lives faded.
So full of warmth were my people, alive and vital. How cold is my temple without them.
Time and tide wait for no man, I know. Men must live and they hunger for more than my rocky paradise can provide.
So I wait, solitary and friendless. My island temple is deserted yet I hear laughter still.
They will return, one day. Those truly loyal will remember their Mother.
I will linger here for them. Old gods never die, they simply sleep and dream of remembrance. I will wait, I am forever.
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really like the sense of an ancient power
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Very nicely done Amy! I like the resignation of the final lines.
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Love the line about “Old gods never die.”
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Home-coming
@Van_Demal
159 words
They chided him. Tears over a dog, indeed! Stella hated water. He couldn’t drown her, couldn’t bear to broach that slow cruelty. Da never forgot. In hospital, reaper’s rattle in his lungs – promise me, he rasped, find her grave, his eyes deliberate as flints.
Grass swallows my boots. Salt-tang and skirling birds on the air. I step onto a rock sunk in the swept green blades. Clothed in lichen, it hunches a shoulder against nature. I gather memories; I was a babe in arms back in ‘30. We survived, but we never grew.
Home, my heart new-born. This is my foundation, my magnetic north, these chips of rock in the sea. Above the bay the stone shelters, stones of my ancestors – weather-worn, mottled with creeping life – like a rosary in the landscape, tell the distance we’ve come.
I place the Hirta pebble Da pressed on me, a votive on Stella’s haugr. That leaving persisted in him all his life.
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great lines throughout – fave is ‘like a rosary on the landscape’
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Nice work Van. Can’t pick a favourite line. It’s a great piece of writing.
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Truly fine writing. Very powerful and moving story.
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I love the poetry in your prose. It sets a wonderful tone, here, of contemplation, solemnity and melancholy. The stone as a votive coming on the heels of the rosaried landscape was just splendid.
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A New Star Is Born
Out of the Highland mist emerged three camels. Their riders, white bearded men wearing oriental gowns and a turband, were quarreling.
‘You may be a wise man, Balthazar, but you skipped the geography classes, didn’t you?’ Melchior lashed out.
‘Oh really?’ Balthazar replied, with a smug grin on his face.
Before them appeared a cleit, from which emanated the soft, inviting light only a campfire in the middle of winter can produce.
The men dismounted and went inside, where they found a baby in a crib, flanked by the mother and the father.
‘Is this The One?’ Caspar asked. ‘We are looking for a baby that will face many challenges, but that will ultimately change our world.’
Without blinking an eye the father retorted: ‘She’s a Scottish lass. She won’t take crap from anyone.’
‘What’s her name?’ Melchior asked.
‘Stella,’ the mother answered.
‘Stella,’ the three men whispered simultaneously, in awe.
They started unpacking their gifts.
@bartvangoethem
156 words
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great take on a classic
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So funny–well-done!
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I’d like to hear what their gifts for this baby were. Love it!
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Loved this. Oh how the world would have been a different place.
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Hahah! Very amusing story, and very true about Scottish lasses. Really chuckled at -‘Stella,’ the three men whispered simultaneously, in awe. –
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For want of a GPS locator… 🙂 I’d love to know what sort of faith would spring up from these beginnings.
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Love it! Made me giggle!
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He he! How I would love to follow the course of history from this event. Love the father’s response as well as the awe from the wise men.
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‘Ghost of a Chance.’
David Shakes
@TheShakes72
160 words
The cries of the baby and the cries of the gulls intermingle – a shrill cacophony.
Ghosts sweep down the mist covered hillside, drawn longingly to the heady sound of humanity.
In their final moments they had wished they’d never left the island. Death heard, binding them here beyond time and tide.
Their spirits glide through derelict homesteads toward the miraculous birth.
They’re moths to a flame, longing to bask in the heat of new life.
They’d watched the girl from the mainland arrive. Noted the swell of her belly; her anguish.
Saw her hide from the angry voices and searching torches of the men that followed.
“Stella!” the one had cried until his voice was raw.
In the broken down bothy the child’s cries have ceased.
Panicked, they rush through the holes in the stone wall.
The girl has the child suckling.
She looks them in the eye, as though they were corporeal.
“Welcome. We’ve been waiting.” she says.
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love ‘the heady sound of humanity’ and the last line is great
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This is just stunning. Every line. Great story.
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I agree. Just stunning! Excellent writing.
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An apt title. 😉 What a mysterious, spooky gathering, I enjoyed it.
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Think this is your best yet David, and that’s no small feat. I love the urgency and tension, and that knowing tone in the last line.
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In such a short piece, you successfully bring isolated elements together: one group isolated in death, the other woman isolated by her community (for the pregnancy, for having special gifts). I love how you were able to establish all of that and then end on a note of union.
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Abandonment
The bitter whine of the wind whipping across the deserted landscape was suddenly broken by the wail of a hungry newborn. The sound issued from one of the stone cleits topped with turf scattered across the isle. The cry increased steadily in volume as the child’s distress grew. Only the moaning wind replied to the infant’s demands.
The sturdy stones of the building shivered and grated. Dirt puffed out into the air from the joints between the rocks. The cleit quivered, spalls of rock peeling from every surface. Huge cracks spiderwebbed their way across the stones. The babe’s cry was a constant high-pitched shrill.
The newborn’s tone filled with rage as well as hunger. Tremors rolled across the surface of the island, till the ground quivered like jello. Stone fractured. The cleit burst open like a rotten fruit, spitting forth seeds of jagged rock. The infant fell silent, waiting. The island waited with it.
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karnemily@yahoo.com
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Really enjoyed this.
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great story esp. last three lines
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Great descriptive, and visual writing in this, really enjoyed it.
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Nice! At first I fear for the child, but then realized she was the cause.
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Run
160 Words
@CaseyCaseRose
Again I dreamt of rolling green fields and stone hewn houses.
And that sound.
The mist from my dreams places a cold tendril on my heart.
Doubt.
I did my duty, I moved the people. They were not my neighbors but my fellow countrymen and we could not leave them to be felled by invaders.
I did not know the jigsaw pieces of their families.
A disheveled woman pulled at my sleeve at begged to help her find her baby.
“She’s not had a babe in ten years. She’s gone mad, just push ahead,” said another villager walking by.
She cried and pulled but I pushed her on to the hurrying crowd.
I could see the outlines of military horses on the hill above.
I mounted my horse and urged the crowds forward.
On the wind I heard a cry.
Wee but strong.
Small, demanding lungs.
The sound was swallowed up by angry hoofbeats and I didn’t dare look back.
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really liked this – esp. ‘I did not know the jigsaw pieces of their families’
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Oh yes. I can see and feel it. Powerful story.
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Terrifying. I wonder how long after the event these dreams come? I can see the soldier being haunted for decades by his choice, and I’m sure I’ll be haunted for a long while by your story.
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This is hauntingly moving. Well done.
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Time to Leave
“It’s time.” whispered Rob.
Time. After hundreds of years, and generations of my family living in the same croft, climbing the same hills and cliffs . . . now was time for us to leave. My Ella would be the last baby born on this island. My kind-hearted, innocent, bonny wee St Ella of St Kilda would not know her home.
Daddy always told me as we walked to the church meeting house each Sunday morning that we were caretakers of the island: “God gi’ us this land t’ mind. We tek care o’ the land f’r Him, and the land will tek care o’ us.”
We hadn’t taken care of it. We killed the land when we changed the way we farmed, and now it would no longer sustain us.
The last of us left an open bible and pile of oats in each house, and boarded the boat for the mainland, our eyes laden with tears of repentance.
Word Count: 157
@faithunlocked
http://faithunlocked.wordpress.com
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Great use of the history, It read like the last few lines in a much longer novel. Great job
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Thank you!
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Beautiful use of ‘time’ and a story well written, you conveyed regret so well.
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Thank you!
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Beginnings
Stella snuggled down. ‘Tell me the story again, Nanna.’
‘Twas a windy day when we sailed away, on the sea to Scotland.
I was a babe in my mother’s arms.
We waved goodbye to the home we knew.
Our sheep were sold, our houses cleared.
All we had was packed up tight in boxes stowed at the stern.’
Stella’s eyelids were drooping.
‘Old and young, lads and girls, husbands and wives boarded the boat to the mainland.
The boat was heavy with all of us and pitched and yawed, but on we sailed, and sighted land -’
And she whispered, as Stella slept ‘- and cheered that we’d come to Scotland.
I was three when we left, in a Navy sloop.
The dogs were weighted down, and drowned.
They didn’t know I saw it all.
Scotland was where my life began.’
She glanced at the view of Central Park, and gently closed the door.
@lizhedgecock
152 words
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lovely ending
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Thanks! Unfortunately I have ‘The Train To Glasgow’ going through my head…
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‘The boat was heavy with all of us’ is a brilliant image. I love how far in time and distance we travel in your story. Beautifully told.
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Lovely storytelling and the last line clinched it.
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Has the genuine feel of an old lady’s memories. Wonderful.
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“Happy”
by Michael Seese
160 words
Burial mounds are never merry places. Except for today.
The denizens of the small town in western Ayrshire County arose in collective joy, as if under the spell of magic. Even the newborns saw fit to exchange their colicky cries for contented squeals.
The bells of the church, normally reproachful and condescending, rang gaily this morn. The parishioners filed faithfully into the nave and settled into their favored spaces. The priest rose, gazed upon his flock with loving eyes, and delivered his sermon with a single word.
“Happy.”
Then the preparations began. Homes were tidied, picnic lunches were prepared, hearth fires were extinguished, and affairs were put in order.
Hand in hand, with voices in collective harmony, they marched to the glen. There, the witch directed them to the shallow sepulchres she had impelled them to dig a fortnight ago. Still singing, they stepped in and began burying themselves alive.
And thus was “born” the appropriately named town of Beòcairn.
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Gosh! So marvellously odd! I will never see the word ‘happy’ in the same light again! Great writing Michael.
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So well written – I can practically see them all, pulling down the dirt. Brrr!
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Wow. Could see this as a longer piece. Eerie and creepy, and of course so well-written.
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“As if under a spell” indeed. I like how this plays out as local lore, yet so vivid that it can’t be safely regarded as mere lore.
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Into the Lair
by Nancy Chenier
@rowdy_phantom
160 words
“What? Moira, you can’t be here. Mamadh’s working.”
“Help get the shiny circles.”
“Why aren’t you home? Where’s Dadaidh?”
“Want to get circles.”
“Coins. I’ll bring you some. Now, go home.”
“Can help Mamaidh.”
“I don’t need—Wait! Moira!”
“It’s big, Mamaidh. It’s big.”
“Shush! Yes, it’s very big. Now go back to Dadaich. He has honey custard for you.”
“Dragon sleeping.”
“Great Skatha! Moira, get back! It’s waking up.”
“Those are the dragon’s eyes. Hi, Dragon!”
“M’Lady, please don’t be angry.”
“Mamaidh’s on the ground.”
“Moira, come back to Mamaidh.”
“Dragon can sing.”
Leave now, slave. I accept your offering.
“It’s not so noisy. Ooo, sparkle tickles!”
“Please—oh, Mighty One, eat me instead.”
I don’t intend to eat her, wretch. I intend to foster her.
“But—”
Begone, Moorlander, before I change my mind and incinerate your entire brood.
“Mamaidh’s crying.”
“Oh, my little star…”
“Bye-bye, Mamaidh. More magic!”
Listen closely, little one, and learn your own magic.
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Pioneer
Another one, off to their grave. Margaret and her daughters covered their ears as ambulances with roaring sirens sped down the lane towards the tiny hospital. A mysterious and merciless virus had wiped out almost the entire population of this once thriving village. The hope for the village rested in the competent hands of Dr. Stella Richmond, a scientist from London. Margaret and her girls had no electricity in their primitive country home, but they had a radio that they kept on at all times.
“Mama, Dr. Stella is on the radio!” screamed the youngest daughter, Lilith.
“My fellow countrymen, I am proud to announce that the vaccine I procured from England has cured an infant of this virus that has ravaged our population,” Dr. Stella announced triumphantly. “I am happy to report that all who have been stricken will now be cured!”
Dr. Lilith Smithson held her great-grandson’s hand as they placed the flowers at Dr. Stella’s grave.
@peacesong464
159 words
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Simply marvelous, how this story unfolds. Well-done!
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Thank you so much!
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You really conveyed time passing with a great reveal at the end.
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Stella meandered through the pea-soup fog. It felt as if she had been hiking for days. As she crested the hill, Stella spotted the ancient stone hut. Her only hope was that the fog would conceal her. She quickened her pace as the fog lifted. The winter sun would soon shed its light on the world.
The structure became clearer as she approached. It appeared to be an ancient shepherd’s den. A thick blanket of moss covered its roof. Shrieks and wails emerged from the stone structure, and she wondered what battle was raging. Stella took a deep breath and touched the pearl-inlaid handle of her dagger.
A tired-looking woman wearing a nondescript cotton dress stepped out, cradling a baby. “Stella, you’re finally here,” she yelled over the child’s wails. As the woman handed over her charge, Stella envied the fog for its ability to disappear so quickly.
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Whoops, newbie here, I forgot my title and word count:
The Moor (148 words)
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I chuckled when I reached the end. You set it up to be a pretty standard quest narrative but then it ends up in an unexpected place: Nanny Quest.
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A great lead up to an unexpected end. A wonderful final touch; Stella’s envy.
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Tom Smith
@sunderland101
We Found It
160 Words
“Told you I’d find it.” The hike had moistened their brows and stolen their breath, but Stella still found the energy to be superior. “That’s 50p you owe me.” Rachel never agreed to the bet, but handed over the money anyway.
Rachel offered an explanation for the ramshackle house in the middle of the field “I heard he’s homophobic.”
“You mean claustrophobic.”
“No, he thought the towns were full of “gays” so he built a house in a field to get away from them.”
“Wrong. His Eskimo wife died whilst giving birth to their baby so he built an igloo to honour her.”
“He hates gays!”
“He collects a widows pension!” Stella didn’t appreciate Rachel fighting her corner. “Let’s ask him.”
He saw the girls approaching, he knew it would work; all he had to do was create intrigue and wait for the kids to verify the adults rumours. He’d be long gone by the time their parents missed them.
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What a creepy turn this one takes! And tragic since the dialogue between the girls made me rather like Rachel–especially from her first observation of Stella. I like how that last line contains so much menace.
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Great exchange between the girls, very engaging.
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So well told, and a great, albeit rather cringe-inducing twist. Run girls!
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The Nameless Child
Marie sang, hoping to drown out the distant screams of the dogs, as she swaddled the child in grandmammie’s shawl, folding in a hearthstone and tieing the loose ends to hold it securely.
The child scrutinised her coldly, with her father’s eyes, and Marie shivered.
The path to the harbour lead past his rude stone shelter and the babe mewled, but Marie knew he slept during daylight. Still, she hurried on.
Looking into the grey waters, she saw the dogs, tails swaying like kelp fields, heads pinned by weighted collars. She held the child out over the waves, arms straining at the weight of the stone. Seeing again the constellations scattered across the black orbs of her eyes, Marie smiled.
“If I could keep you, I’d love you forever and call you Stella, for the stars in your eyes.”
Then the weighted child tumbled end over end to the sea, and sank to the forest of dogs.
For now.
159 words
@Karl_A_Russell
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The drowning of the dogs has always haunted me from the first time I heard of the island’s evacuation. What you’ve done with that is stunning. Great writing as always.
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Coo. Nice. Such evocative imagery, my fav ‘ she saw the dogs, tails swaying like kelp fields’ and the baby tumbling… for now. Great story. Did the dogs have hats by any chance too? 🙂
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Great writing. So powerful and evocative. Tis clear this is not the end of the story…
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Thanks guys, glad you liked it! And Marie, apologies for making your namesake do something so very wrong… 🙂
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Horrific and sad.
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Whoa, brutal–and yet the insinuation of something more (like maybe grandmammie’s shawl might have some magic to it). The image of the kelp forest of dogs is gut-wrenching–never mind that of a swaddled baby tumbling into it. The note it ends on makes me think some sort of revenge as well as some magical return. So much brewing under the surface of the words.
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The Office Outing
“You’re yampy Stella; that’s never a baby!”
“So what is it?”
May’s mouth flapped like that silly singing fish screensaver she’d put on Eric’s PC, she didn’t know what the noise was, but she’d never say.
“We’ll go,” she snapped. “I’ll show you.”
Getting down the cliff was difficult, but Mother used to say that easy things weren’t worth the effort. Course, she said I was too old to be messing around with fellas too, and that was years before she moved into the urn on the mantlepiece.
We made it though, and May was ecstatic to find screeching seabirds, nesting in a ruined crofter’s cottage.
“See?”
The driftwood left splinters in my hands and a muddy mark on my Marks’s blouse, but it did far worse to May, and I had to clamber up the cliffside alone.
But when the tide comes in, she’ll be gone, and I’ll be on the ferry home, sharing Eric’s Fruit and Nut bar.
160 words, plus a very humble apology…
@Karl_A_Russell
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Brilliant! “years before she moved into the urn on the mantlepiece ” is especially good.
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Thanks Voima! It was fun trying to sound like someone else, especially when the real Stella has such a distinctive voice, but the remembered wisdom of a dear departed Mother is one of her hallmarks.
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Sorry Dragons! For a share of the fabled fruit and nut, could you please change crodter’s to crofter’s?
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All right, but reluctantly. I thought crodters might be some sort of glorious mythical beast.
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Thank you! No mythical beast, just a sudden realisation that I hadn’t crammed in all 4 of the prompts I was aiming for…
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Hehehhheee. Love it. You never feel outside of your stories. Like the REAL Stella, you are master of characters and dialogue. And the urn was a really good touch but as The Dragoness knows and will confirm I;m sure… who in the WHOLE OF STEAMING HELL would share a chocolate bar!! 🙂 😉
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I would – I’m not that big a fan. 🙂
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masterful. evocative dialogue and wonderful imagery once again ….
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The Remains of the Days
by A J Walker
Moira knelt down to touch the quartz block at the base of the cairn. It seemed only moments ago she’d placed it there. Quartz, a fleck of light in the bleak monument to such a short life. It felt greasy with rain and lichen as she closed her eyes to remember. Stella had died so young, had never even walked on the island.
The arthritis in her knees made Moira wince as she creaked herself up and she leant against the monument grateful for its solidity. Wiping away at her face she left a gritty smear across her cheeks.
They had to leave the island and their way of life behind. She would never see it again; only their ghosts would remain. She worried so much now about where she’d go for her weekly talk with Stella.
Then she was stood above the sheer cliffs looking out across the brooding Atlantic, feeling the wind, as silent waves crashed below her.
(160 words)
@zevonesque
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Beautiful story.
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You managed to capture such pain and loss here, very sad indeed but also that the majestically grim landscape would still remain with Stella’s ghost as the only inhabitant. Very moving indeed.
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Strong stuff AJ – really felt for Moira and her fears.
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Labor Pains
“Captain, the planet is undergoing some sort of geologic instability. The epicenter appears to be half a kilometer to the west.”
“Dammit! I’ve spent my whole career looking for a place to retire, and I’m not leaving this planet unless I have to. Can we stay?”
“Unclear. The quakes are short-lived, but the time in between each is decreasing.”
“Fine. Let’s take the shuttle and fly around for a bit until they settle down. I hope the valley doesn’t collapse.”
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Stella (for that is how the planet thought of herself) was having a bad day. She’d thought she’d given birth to her last moon billions of years ago, but these Stellaquakes couldn’t possibly be anything else. Oh, that hurt. Wasn’t she too old for this?
Obviously not.
Stella let the next quake open the cave near the northern edge of her largest continent. She hoped not too many creatures lived around there, because giving birth was really quite messy.
@drmagoo
159 words
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This is just brilliant!
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Wow, extremely creative, interesting piece.
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That made me chuckle. With the title, I knew exactly what was happening in the first line. I was delighted with the shift in POV, (“Valley” indeed!) and with the planet’s very human attitude toward a late unexpected birth.
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🙂 Stellaquakes! Marvellous work.
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Joshua Bertetta
160 Words
@JBertetta
Theology
“Is it in there?”
“I don’t know.”
They giggled as children should.
“I wanna see.”
His hand a loose fist, he slid his thumb to the side and peered into the dark. “Darn it!”
“Try to catch it again!”
Suckling their newborn brother at her breast, Aife chuckled here where for countless generations women brought children into the world. Here in this womb in the land of mist where until the invasion people did not ask questions in black and white for words like “yes” and “no” did not exist.
She’d call the baby Lugh, she decided, because the light of the sun spilled through spaces between the stones the moment he passed through and set his tuft of red hair aflame.
The very same light Lugh’s brother and sister, still giggling, still tried to catch.
“Keep your hand right there Stella,” she said. “There. See? You can hold the sun beams with an open hand, not in a fist.”
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So fine.
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Thanks Voimaoy. That means a lot. Not many comments on my writing, so much appreciated.
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I enjoy how the play of children sandwiches an essential note: invasion. It explains the “should” of the third lone. I loved how even though that word (invasion) lurks like a leviathan in the background, there is still birth and joy and hope, leading up to that last line–which can serve, perhaps, as wisdom for the invaders.
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Wow, what a thoughtful comment. Thank you so very much! Greatly appreciated 🙂
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I love how you layer so many levels of meaning into your writing Joshua.
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Jeez, that’s real nice Karl. I try to do that with a lot of my writing, especially with my novel (excerpts on my blog). Thanks for taking the time to read and comment 🙂
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Daily Shorts
@2020Hines_Sight
Word Count: 158
Harvest Time
Hirta knew the stone hut with its mossy grass roof was the perfect place to raise the children, until they reached maturity.
Anders matured first and Stella was sent to fetch the warden. When they returned Stella was perched on his back, as she was too weak to walk.
“Anders,” Hirta yelled. “Come get this child!”
Hirta chided Stella as Anders lifted her from the warden’s back. “The warden is never to carry you.”
“She ran out of the life tea,” the warden advised calmly.
“She had enough for a week,” Hirta bellowed. “Go! Prepare the tea,” She commanded Stella.
As the warden was inspecting Anders, Stella emerged with the life tea.
“Anders is strong and well built. He’ll make a good worker,” he said sipping the tea. ” However this one will never mature. What shall we to do?”
“Send her to be harvested for the hungry and make sure I get two fresh eggs by weeks end.”
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I’m not sure whether Stella or Anders is better off! I like the idea of ‘life tea’ what a strange and creative idea!
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This is gloriously deranged – I would dearly love to read more about their world, and hope that poor Stella escapes her fate.
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The Survivors
The dingy slid through oily waters, treacherous waves causing Isabelle to cling onto the ornate box in her lap. Muttering a prayer to St Ellard, Isabella looked back at the sullen isle. A sanctuary that over time had lost its way, traditions discarded, community replaced by dissent and mistrust.
The awaiting ship was vast, callused hands helping Isabella aboard. No cabin for privacy, just the darkness of the hold, weakly resisted by a lantern’s flaxen light.
Settling in a corner, Isabella ignored the mute stares of her fellow evacuees. Their ignorance had caused this, their lack of appreciation, of respect.
A man, emboldened by shadows, whispered that Isabella and her kind would soon reside within the forest of bones on the seabed. A woman’s trembling voice hushing him.
Isabella ignored them it was time to feed the baby. The blade drew scarlet across her wrist. Isabella lifted the box’s lid, resting her hand within.
A rough tongue lapped hungrily.
159 words
@imageronin
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