Awwww, our poor runaway bride was really put through the wringer this week! Thank you for giving her a voice and a story, even if her voice cackled and her story angsted. It was great seeing familiar faces as well as bunches of new ones–WHAT A PARTY!!! And finally, a big Flash! Friday wedding thank you to judge Monica Heffner.
Remember to check back Monday to see which story will be highlighted at Flash Points, and Tuesday for Dragon Munchies.
Judge Monica Heffner says, There were a lot of great entries, and I had a hard time choosing only one winner. I loved how some of the entries were softer with a gentle touch (nice for a wedding theme), while others kept a faster pace with more action. It was a nice contrast which kept the reading exciting.
SECOND RUNNER UP
Betsy Streeter. Untitled. This was a touching story of that difficult balance we all try to reach between doing what makes us happy and pleasing others. I especially liked the line, “The open upstairs window is a square eye, gazing, expectant.”
FIRST RUNNER UP
Whitney Healy, “Cold Feet.” Whitney’s twist at the end was unexpected and it made the whole story. I was sure she was running away! I liked how Robert understood his bride. That was a nice touch. Slightly over word count, but since it was a wedding day, the Dragon of Disqualification looked the other way.
And our “Don’t say I didn’t warn you“
DRAGON WINNER IS….
I loved the realness between the two characters. Kevin’s story has a great balance between the conversation, giving a feel for the setting, and engaging the characters thoughts and feelings. Nice job!
Congratulations, Kevin! Here are your Winner’s Page, your eBadge (below), and your winning Tale. Please contact me asap with your email address so I can interview you for Wednesday’s “Sixty Seconds” feature.
If We Go Out, This Is Our Future
Mika was trying to whisper to me and she was being really obvious about it. It was bad enough that she insisted on coming to Mom’s wedding; now everyone thinks she’s my date. If anyone met her before today, it wouldn’t even be a thought. Now she’s just ANOTHER reason I’m in a cold sweat in a sea of amethyst dresses and ties.
“You think we can sneak out of here? I’m completely willing to hotwire a car.”
“Hey, YOU wanted to come. You can’t complain now, miss “I’m going to paint my nails for this.”
“That was before I knew your family was crazy!”
“Says she who had to be talked out of bringing their iguana. And less we forget that family reunion you brought me to…”
“Touché. But your family’s still nuts.”
My uncle was half asleep, but when he snapped awake, we held hands and watched the altar with stepford smiles – at least until he fell back asleep.
“You want to know why they’re nuts – especially today? Because this is her fourth wedding!”
“That’s not really a good reason –”
“– in TWO YEARS!”
Mika’s mouth dropped, and I politely closed it for her before one of the many mosquitoes decided to make a meal out of her tongue.
“These things ALWAYS go wrong and everyone tries their best to get out of it. I was trying to do the same – BUT NO! You had to burst in and go “Oh my god! Martin, can I go with you to this wedding?”
“I just wanted to go to a wedding that wasn’t at City Hall! And I didn’t expect to almost get called in to be a bridesmaid.”
“I guess you’re family now.”
A clamor at the front got our attention. My cousin, the ring bearer, was presenting the ring and his hair was starting to rise – he knows what happens around this point because he got the same chill that went down my neck when Mom’s hands started to shake.
“Were you serious about hotwiring a car?”
“What changed your mind?”
“Every time the wedding bombed, Mom’s hands shook before picking up the ring. She would then run away and we’d spend three days looking for her.”
“Yeah, and someone always got injured trying to stop her – or there’s fire.”
“The second one had tiki torches. The altar almost exploded.”
“So when do we go?”
“As soon as she runs past us. It’ll look like we’re trying to stop her.”
“So sneaky! Remind me why haven’t we gone out again?”
“Because crazy runs in BOTH our families and this might happen to us down the line?”
“Oh yeah, that’s right. Get ready; she’s starting to bail!”